Frankie's poems / prose / personal proverbs

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  1. Doug Denslowe's Avatar

    Doug Denslowe said:

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    Frankie,
    Thank you for you sincere reply to my Comment.I appreciate you're sensitive to the feelings of others,but I must protest the fact that you would remove your poems because of "others' morals"!By doing that,you would deprive everybody of this art,just for the benefit of someone that could simply ignore it,or "change the channel"for lack of a better term.Why should I be deprived of this great piece of poetry because it offends someone else!That's what ART is about,sometimes offending ones senses and making them think or rethink their point of view.I would expect you to defend me,so even though YOU WOULD remove it,I respectfully disagree with that course of action.I will always defend the art and the artist over the people that would take away your right to free speech and only THEIR point of view.If first we start censoring our art,how far is it before we are burning books?P.S.I haven't read all your poetry on this Thread yet,so I have only given you feedback on the few I have read!
     
  2. Frankie Jasmine's Avatar

    Frankie Jasmine said:

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    I understand your point-of-view, Doug. Artists often feel this way. It can deteriorate into a political discussion sometimes, which I try to avoid. That's because everyone has a different tolerance level for what is art and what is offensive (or even worse, pornography). We merely feel differently on this topic. That's OK! And you did get to see the last poem; but you won't see the next poem because it's private, and my conscience would be bothered to post it!

    This is good discussion, Doug. Thank you for putting forth your views, as I did mine. It may give people from around the world something to think about. Let's not discuss it more on this poetry thread, though. My respects to you . . .

    You can open a thread about it if you want to talk about it! It would certainly be appropriate on a Lyrics site, an artist's site.
     
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    No,I said my piece!I feel very protective of you and your poetry,and would be very upset to see you remove it FOR ANY REASON other than your own.Nuff said!
     
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    Quote Originally Posted by Frankie Jasmine View Post
    . . .


    THE CRIMSON FIST OF "THEY"


    A nigrine and ashen aura
    Grips the hell-inflamed realm of "They."
    Neither you nor I, nor man nor beast
    Can birr the leviathon to retreat.
    Withheld by an obduracy,
    Cancerous plagued,
    Transgressor unrepenting.
    A mass of "They" contrived as One;
    The aberration sinking . . .
    Smothering, gasping, suffocating,
    Unconscious pang of "They."

    Birth to deviation--
    Now power to unleash!
    Free! Shed of dawn's first ray.
    Gold of sun, blue of sky, white of dove--
    Peace!
    A time, an era, a place, and "They;"
    Now forgive . . .
    Cannot lose, can't grasp victory--
    Alpha and Omega.




    Frankie Jasmine
    Age 13

    Oooo- Frankiest of Mine!

    Admit it, your knowledge of the "english" language at the age of 13 was really baffling me!
    "Deviation", "nigrine"....etc.

    It may be selfpromotion, as you say, but it shows already at that age your high command of your language, which you have proven in your comments
    on various threads as well.
    Keep blooming- and *twinkling*!

    May you never leave us!
     
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    Wow, I just found this thread. Amazing works, Frankie Sometime, I should share some of my poetry as well I love writing poetry, and I've gotten rather proficient at prose as of lately, as well. Been writing since the beginning of when I first learnt to write!

    Edit: Your command of the English language, as many have noted, was really remarkable at the ages at which you wrote the poems... I've always loved using elevated vocabulary, as well (while others haven't responded as enthusiastically to it )... I think it is one of those things that sets apart the "native speakers" apart from the "speakers with masterful command of the language" Cheers to everyone who is making an effort in any language, either to learn or to speak/write properly!
    Minä olen horjunut, epäilen enemmän kuin ennen
    Mutta halusit ihmisen, sen viat, sen heikkouden
     
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    Please do post your poems and/or prose, Dragonfly. I would love to read them. You'll see that recently so many new poets and songwriters have begun posting on ATL!! I am very impressed at the quality--even of those who have English as a second language! I will keep a look out for any poem you post!!! With pleasure...
     
  7. Doug Denslowe's Avatar

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    Re:The CrimsonFist of "They"
    SHOWOFF!!!!!
     
  8. Frankie Jasmine's Avatar

    Frankie Jasmine said:

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    Quote Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe View Post
    Re:The CrimsonFist of "They"
    SHOWOFF!!!!!
    Hahahha!! You wouldn't be calling me a SHOWOFF if you truly knew how I felt back then!!!
    I needed flowers from someone; someone to like my poetry THEN; someone to be nice to me; or someone to call 911 !!!

    See post #79, the first half.

    _ _ _ _ _

    P.S. Enough comments have been made about "Crimson First of 'They'" that this weekend, footnotes are going to be added to that poem and "Bound to Nullity."
    Last edited by Frankie Jasmine; 09-22-2012 at 02:35 AM.
     
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    In that case, I'll add my comment about "The Crimson Fist of 'They'" as well Fantastic piece, Frankie! It was wonderful to read, and I could feel the emotions you'd put into it. I really liked the flow of it, as well.
    Minä olen horjunut, epäilen enemmän kuin ennen
    Mutta halusit ihmisen, sen viat, sen heikkouden
     
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    Quote Originally Posted by doug denslowe View Post
    re:the crimsonfist of "they"
    showoff!!!!!
    Hillarious!
    "Gilgamesh, where are you hurrying to?
    You will never find that life for which you are looking.
    When the gods created man they allotted to him death,
    but life they retained in their own keeping"
     
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    Frankie Jasmine said:

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    Quote Originally Posted by Frankie Jasmine View Post
    Hahahha!! You wouldn't be calling me a SHOWOFF if you truly knew how I felt back then!!!
    I needed flowers from someone; someone to like my poetry THEN; someone to be nice to me; or someone to call 911 !!!

    See post #79, the first half.

    _ _ _ _ _

    P.S. Enough comments have been made about "Crimson Fist of 'They'" that this weekend, footnotes are going to be added to that poem and "Bound to Nullity."

    09-23-2012: FOOTNOTES have been added to "The Crimson Fist of 'They' " (#53) and "Bound to Nullity." (#51)

    http://www.allthelyrics.com/forum/po...roverbs-3.html
     
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    [QUOTE=Frankie Jasmine;967838][COLOR="#cc0000"]If anyone is offended by this poem or feels it is inappropriate, I will gladly remove it . . .

    Frankie no! maybe i shouldn't suggest that anyone has privilege that everyyone else would not have, but as much as we know you so well, you of all people should not worry about offending people. first of all i know that you would never be frivolous or unfeeling in anything that you would post anywhere in public...and above that i agree with everything that Doug has said, so if you want to read his posts again then you'll know everything else that i have to say as well
    Music is what feelings sound like
    Listen to the Love
    ~♥♥~
     
  13. Frankie Jasmine's Avatar

    Frankie Jasmine said:

    Default Alone

    . . .


    Alone
    Storms rage from within
    And
    From without
    I am without
    I am
    Alone



    Frankie Jasmine
    09-24-2012
    Last edited by Frankie Jasmine; 09-24-2012 at 12:18 PM.
     
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    Frankie Jasmine said:

    Default Scavengers

    . . .


    The scavengers
    Have arrived
    And although I remain
    Alive
    They peck at my throat
    As if to take away my last
    Breath
    I do not welcome
    Death
    I have been here before
    Old faces at
    My door
    Knocking as the specters
    They are;
    Awakening children
    In the middle of their
    Sleep,
    The poor, the weary,
    The weak,
    Seeking always victims
    To fill their outrageous
    Guts.
    Gluttons, thieves, and plunderers
    How can they live with themselves
    I wonder
    But I know all too well



    Frankie Jasmine
    09-24-2012



    I don’t know if this poem is complete or not. Will decide later…
    Last edited by Frankie Jasmine; 09-25-2012 at 11:11 AM.
     
  15. Frankie Jasmine's Avatar

    Frankie Jasmine said:

    Default Bitter

    . . .


    I am bitter
    Although not my usual
    State
    There is no hope in
    Hate
    No future lies ahead for
    Vengeful ones.
    Yet I am morphing
    Into one.
    Maybe it’s not too
    Late
    To stay the onrush
    Of a thousand years of
    Feelings
    But I am left
    Reeling
    Unable to catch a clear thought
    Incapable of spoken word or
    Forceful movement
    I nearly relent
    But I am not all spent
    And I will not give in
    To the same sins
    Of the others
    Who bother me so
    Who raid my cupboards,
    Strip my house bare
    Leave me lying there
    Without a shred


    Frankie Jasmine
    09-24-12
    Last edited by Frankie Jasmine; 09-27-2012 at 06:22 PM.
     
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    Frankie Jasmine said:

    Default Desert

    . . .

    Once again
    I am alone
    Full of pain
    With no
    Healer in sight.
    I lie here in the night
    Freezing
    No will
    To cover my bones.
    Is this my home?
    I’ve been here
    Before
    Among the things that
    Slither in the night
    I even ignore my fright
    For I haven’t the strength
    To move beyond it.

    In the day I am scorched
    Where is my shelter
    Where is my hope
    No ropes hold me fast
    Yet I cannot move
    Any more freely than that.
    Must I describe the scene?
    You know it.
    No sense in exposing gore
    Shriveled up from long years
    Of wounds left unattended.
    No one cared.
    It is a desert.
    As part of the sand
    One of the rocks
    Another carcass
    Bleached white
    In the sun
    I am.


    Frankie Jasmine
    09-24-2012
    Last edited by Frankie Jasmine; 09-25-2012 at 02:10 AM.
     
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    Frankie Jasmine said:

    Default Black Hole - Entry Number One

    . . .


    Did you hear me cry
    As I was swallowed whole
    Or was the audio sucked away, too,
    So you didn’t know?

    Through loudness
    I am deafened
    Through brightness
    I am blinded
    I scream but cannot
    Make the slightest noise.

    Does anyone know
    That I am gone?
    Will I return home?
    Or is it all done . . .
    Have I passed the
    Event Horizon?


    * * *

    “Did you hear something?”
    ‘No, nothing.’
    “Just for a second--
    Like a yelp--
    Quickly come and gone.
    I was standing on the lawn
    And thought I heard it.”
    ‘No, not a word.’
    “A cry for help??”

    ‘Oh, please. Your imagination
    Gets going then there’s
    This contagion like
    A conspiracy theory!
    You make me weary.’



    ** Quiet **


    “Because you didn’t hear it
    Doesn’t mean it’s a moot point.
    Perhaps there is a sound
    When a tree falls in
    The middle of the forest
    And no one is there
    To hear it.
    I can’t bear this!!

    ‘Over-reacting, as always.
    Go have a strong coffee—
    Never mind, make that a
    Glass of milk.
    Don’t want to hear you
    Drivel on more, you
    About this bilge
    And that which isn’t
    Again.
    Not pleasant
    At all.’


    “Perhaps you’re right, dear.
    What were you saying
    Before?
    Oh, yes, we were planning
    A trip to the shore.
    So nice this time of year,
    Don’t you think?”
    Not a blink
    Of former recognition.

    * * *

    Black Hole Entry Number One.
    Supersonic suction?
    Speed-of-light production?
    Ha! That's as a mere flitting wake
    Behind a quaking little boat
    In Galaxies of Ocean!
    This is beyond human experience!
    Ultra-speed, Numbing sound
    All around.
    A hopeless plight
    When even thinking is
    Negated.
    Nothing is regulated.
    A place
    Where everything
    Becomes Nothing;
    Or so it appears.
    Except fear.




    Frankie Jasmine
    09-24-2012
    Last edited by Frankie Jasmine; 09-27-2012 at 12:56 AM.
     
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    . . .

    [rKE3FSPJu-4]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rKE3FSPJu-4&feature=related[/video]


    (This song used to frighten me to death! )
     
  19. Doug Denslowe's Avatar

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    Re: Alone
    Absolutely Love it.
    Note:Frankie,when you post so many,it's difficult to Reply to each piece.I wrote love this etc.about "Alone"but the comment didn't appear under it.Its appearing here!
    I'll edit this box,after I read and digest each Poem.
    Scavengers:Adore it!IMO complete as is.(First time I've used IMO ever!)
    Bitter:Great Rhymes,but............a little bitter!
    Desert:Wow,being upset Does bring out the Poet in you!Wonderful Poem,but what's for dessert?
    Black Hole:Again,Wow!This could be a short play!All it needs is names for who said what.
    You didn't make this easy,but it was well worth it,your new stuff is really good!!!!
    Last edited by Doug Denslowe; 09-24-2012 at 11:44 PM.
     
  20. Frankie Jasmine's Avatar

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    Understood, Doug. Thank you. Only it doesn't matter--however you wish to do. Each post will show up at the end of the page no matter what (unless, as you say, you re-post each time in the same box).

    It's OK. You just need to put the name of the poem and I'll know which you mean; others wlll too.

    I appreciate that you read them. Thanks very much.