Fall On Me

This song was inspired by a friend who I had to literally carry home from the bar one night. Alot of things that were bottle up were spilled out that night. So I wrote this song for her. I feel it's a bit wordy, though it fits the music pretty good. Just wanted some second opinions if possible.

Fall On Me

I can feel the ground
Shift away out from under me
I listen for the sound
Of your voice as it calls out

At the moment of defeat
I am there to make you see
That it’s alright, just breathe
As your tears fall down…

They can fall on me…

Fall down, down on me
Let the sound of the screams
Guide you home to the safety
Of the world that you’ve known

We’ll escape, escape your pain
Even if the world’s your blade
Enter deep, face the ache,
Let me carry you home,

Let me carry you home…

Find the strength through me
To lift yourself to a new belief
And when you fall from grace
Look to me before you break

I know that you are strong
Resilient, resistant
Though the pain is long gone
It can cycle ‘round, come back around

And then you can fall on me…

Fall down, down on me
Let the sound of the screams
Guide you home to the safety
Of the world that you’ve known

We’ll escape, escape your pain
Even if the world’s your blade
Enter deep, face the ache,
Let me carry you home,

Let me carry you home…

And when you know
That the world is gone
You feel broken, you need someone
Reach out and I will reach for you

And then it shows
The things thought lost
Those little things, you thought were gone
Just reach out and I will reach for you

You can always fall on me...

Fall down, down on me
Let the sound of the screams
Guide you home to the safety
Of the world that you’ve known

We’ll escape, escape your pain
Even if the world’s your blade
Enter deep, face the ache,
Let me carry you home,

Let me carry you home…

shameless bump...

I do protest, I really like this and think a bump was necessary (yay I learnt to spell necessary correctly). I really like the idea of the "Let the sound of the screams, Guide you home to the safety" and in general I just really like this, and the theme

Fantastic song I really like the style of this one it's similar to mine so I can relate to it. It has despair and troubles but it has an answer to those troubles I really like this.

Yes it is wordy but you wrote it for someone. I think that is more important. You have some great lines in here

Originally Posted by Johnb31

Fantastic song I really like the style of this one it's similar to mine so I can relate to it. It has despair and troubles but it has an answer to those troubles I really like this.

Yea man, I tried to make it so while it sounds down and depressing, it still offers hope. Thanks for the kind words!

Wow, I JUST realized that there are over 10,500 views on this page! Thank you so much to those who have viewed and responded to this song.

well done! my favorite line is "As your tears fall down... They can fall on me..." Great heart felt write over all, but those lines stood out to me. You're there for someone. you care. It give the write a larger dimension of feeling...

Those are my favorite lead ins as well. It flows with the music pretty good, too. I'm glad you can read it and see a much deeper meaning in it than just words on paper. thanks dude