First song in months I had a block please comment

Euphoria:

She said don't come*Around here
*I'm I'm a little lost and*Leaving*
but without you to*Hold I'll*Be freezing*
so ill drink an ill get high just to
Pass the time*
I lay among these pictures and I don't care at all*
I'm so comfortable*
So comfortable...
For the first time without you
Euphoria*

Ya I messed up*
I let you down*
but I swear I'll do better if you keep me around*
don't *let me go*
don't leave me laying here amongst the ash and bottles on the ground cause I can love you better now*
I swear I can love you better now..
She said baby maybe we aren't ment forThis love*
the world is too cold*For doves anyway
*maybe we should
Just let go we both know we need time*
*it's too cold for Angels to fly
She said let go
So I'll let go
Slow..

I need a place perfectly poised*
Because I'm fragile*
I can bear no noise*
I have so*Many memories*
I need to let them play thru*
Otherwise they will get all scrambled and I may not*
Remember me*
Remember you...*
And I plead I'm not strong enough*
Not for this*
So I hold these memories and pictures close*
Get high let go Just fall
I'm so comfortable*
So comfortable..*
For the first time without you
Euphoria...

Ya I messed up*
I let you down*
but I swear I'll do better if you keep me around*
don't *let me go*
don't leave me laying here amongst the ash and bottles on the ground cause I can love you better now*
I swear I can love you better now..
She said baby maybe we aren't ment forThis love*
the world is too cold For doves anyway
*maybe we should
Just let go we both know we need time*
*it's too cold for Angels to fly
She said let go
So I'll let go
Slow..
So I'll get drunk*
I'll get stoned*
These memories won't leave me alone*
I'm so comfortable*
So comfortable...*
Frozen on the ground
But I can love you better now*
Swear I can love you better now..


Martin Aragon

Pretty good. I'm not feeling the flow, but it may just be the way I'm reading it... know what I mean?

But I like the story itself. Seems like you're saying you're torn between trying to make a difficult relationship work or walking away from it, and the latter, though hard to do, seems to be best for you in the long run. Is that about right?

c4c on one of mine?

Your song is beautiful and its lyrics are excellent.You seem to be very much attached to it.I like the fact that you are sharing a beautiful and meaningful work.

Sljslj you nailed it thanks
For
The feed back an ya it's hard
Sometimes to get across the way you want a song to
Flow thanks a lot for
The posts i love feed back

Thanks jay

i think that i would need music to actually interpret how you believe the song should flow for at some points it does seem a little disorganised and random. but on the whole the imagery used is effective and moving and you definitely have the potential to be a fine songwriter