first attempt, feedback please?

[verse 1]
im my room, im all alone,
writing lyrics on my phone,
hoping that my **** will drop,
i wanna be rappin like hop,
i really wanna,
rise to the top,
dont ever wanna stop,
i wanna hit the beats, i just wanna drop
best belive me
sat at home,
making my first E.P
just wait and you'll see me,
everyday when you turn on your tv
Think Im lying, mate, im trying,
**** with this, and you'll be dying
coz,
im A Theif In The night,
im on the mic, ill steal your life
once you listen to my rap ****,
you aint going back to that crap ****
i make a single, and the charts i will top it,
cant stop this, i ****ing drop this

[chorus]
im all alone in my room,
all,all,all alone in my room,
making the rap tune
im all alone in my room,
all,all,all alone in my room,
making the rap tune

[verse 2]
come on son, dont mess with me,
im the greatest rapper,you'll ever meet
see me when you walk down the street
come on, lets drop to a beat
123
come battle with me, and you'll see,
im clearly the best mc
no mother****er can match me,
coz
im unpredictable
unforgettable,
watch this blade, ****ing wreck a fool
rap with me ill take you back to school,
make you look a tool
ill be acting cool
ride you like a mother****ing mule
everbody knows
you cant defend or block my blows,
im the lyrical genius nobody know,
white face paint, it glows
thats why i get these hoes
Always On My toes,
Waiting On This **** That Blows,
out with a gun, shooting crows,
That Mother****er nobody knows,

[chorus]


[verse 3]
ill take you places you've never been,
places so obseen
Places So graphic,
and ill take you there, with my hatchet
back to back ****,
horriable places like pit,
that make you unfit,
watch the druggies take a hit,
and your teeth will grit,
best be prepared with your kit
or your in for a long sit
mate its ****,
and i hate it,
But i Really gotta Make It,
Or Ill Break It,
I Need This rap ****,
A Number One Hit,
For The Psychopathics,
im A Juggalo And im Down With the clown,
funny looks walking thorough the town,
but i dont care coz soon ill be crowned
and you will all get down,
to your kness, and beg me please,
for a couple of e's
so you can talk to the trees

[chorus]

[Final Verse]
finally,
introduce me,
im terry b,
im a lyrical g,
come get to know me,
i might Not Be Your Age yeah?
But Im A lyrical Savior
and my rhymes are major
and im a lifechanger,
and im in it for the danger

[chorus]
[chorus]

i'm not really into rap myself but even I can read the lyrics and they do roll of the tongue easily. I'm not keen on the content but that's due to my opposite taste in music I assume but you have made good use of words.

Feel free to leave me some feedback on my latest http://www.allthelyrics.com/forum/ly...se-review.html


Thanks

dude, u r op point. love ur use of words...