Save My Life

Just wrote this now. The rhythm works in my head, and I want to start writing music for it asap

Save My Life - Copyright © RobberBaron Enterprises 2012

[Verse]

The world around me collapsed and left me alone,
Then you found me there in the dark and made me feel home,
But I guess that now I can see it was just sympathy,
It's such a painful word, cos you mean so much to me

[Pre-Chorus]

And when you tell me to leave,
I die another time, you see,
I tiptoe closer to the,
Edge of me

[Chorus]

So when I try oh could you save my life?
When I cry could you hold me through the night?
Just a few steps away, only you'd make me stay,
But your sympathy's running dry,
But when I die would you even blink an eye?

[Verse]

What use are memories now when they're all your lies?
What good is holding my hand when I know that you're counting the seconds go by?
And when you know I'm drowning in fear when it's nights like this,
No use asking for help from the one that I'm always afraid to miss

[Pre-Chorus]

And when you walk away you,
Leave a scar on me,
And when I mend it you just,
Tear it at the seams

[Chorus]

If you ever try then you might just save my life,
If you realise that you miss me in the night,
Just a few steps away, please just hold me and say,
That you're gonna make it alright,
Only you, I pray, would give me back my mind

[Bridge]

Fool me once and it’s a shame on you, but oh,
Fool my heart and it will break in two,
Love won’t let me give up after all this time,
But now I know I won’t escape alive

[Chorus]

But when I die will you even blink an eye?
And when I cry will you even realise?
Or will I be alone, just a voice on the phone,
When I call but you don’t reply,
Maybe then you will see only you could’ve saved my life

Working on mp3.

You have always left kind words on my posts,so I leave this with the best intensions.The verses are a mouthful,I tried singing/reciting them,and had trouble with both.At least try to put commas,to make it easier to to sing and to know where to pause.You have good song/story ideas,now make them singable to the causual viewer.Keep it up,your on the right track.Doug

Try it in a 2/4 beat with four bars per line
I'll make the sound file, then you'll see, you'll all see, MUAHAHAHAHAHAH

These are a good set of lyrics. It is something that you would hear from The Goo Goo Dolls. I really like this line: "Fool my heart and it will break in two"

So well witten ����