Dead Eyes

been a while blah blah blah I don't give a ****!!!!!! here's a new something to rated by you lovely people!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


You have seen the change coming over me
now I’m rotting from the inside out
you can feel the pain bubbling in my veins
for more I simply scream and shout

you've seen it inside of me
there's no need to lie to me
I know just what you fear
afraid of what I’ll become
keep a hold of the gun
I’d never wanna hurt you my dear

look into my Dead Eyes
see what's going on inside
look into my Dead Eyes, baby!
Look into my Dead Eyes
gaze into my Dead Eyes
wait and see just what's coming out!
Yeah!

The creature I’ve made, eating my brain
you struggle to break me free
but it's not my curse, I say it could be worse
why can't I see it's killing me

I simply can not believe
that you still love me
no matter what I do you stay put
sadly I’m all alone
my mind's not my own
beware of the Dead Eye look

stare into my Dead Eyes
please run for your life
beware of the Dead Eyes, baby
look into my Dead Eyes
gaze into my Dead Eyes
I cant control it, it's breaking out!

OH the Dead Eyed
****ing monster
Is a raging
and controlling
forcing, his way out
of ME!!!!!!!!!
feel the
hands on your throat
choke the life out
of you NOW!!!!!!!
if you live
you'll ****ing regret
letting me live
living this LIE!!!!!!!!!!!

Gaze into the Dead Eyes
Fall into the Dead Eyes
Drown inside Dead Eyes
Trapped inside the Dead Eyes
You are Dead to ME!!!!!!!!!!!!

I didn't like "look into my Dead Eyes
see what's going on inside
look into my Dead Eyes, baby!
Look into my Dead Eyes
gaze into my Dead Eyes" until I read what you did with it at the end. Other than that I think you did an overall good job.

cheers dude. what put you off with regards to the bit you didn't like

I'm not a huge fan of line-to-line repetition that's all.

thanks for the input mate!