Walking Contridiction

When I was trying to explain the vocal style of the Lyrics(there I go Capitalizing words again!)I said in "pain"only as a vocal sound.Let me ask you this;does Janis sound like she's in a little pain while singing "Ball and Chain"?Now maybe you'll understand the vocal style I was attempting to explain.Not in pain,literally,but in such ecstasy,that is almost sounds that way.I hope this explanation helps a little.

Great song, leaves me ambivalent (afterall it's a walking contradiction)

Have you really given up on Love?

Originally Posted by curiosity_kills_the_cat

Great song, leaves me ambivalent (afterall it's a walking contradiction)

Have you really given up on Love?

But,I'm still a man!

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

But,I'm still a man!

Ah, i get the point.

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

But,I'm still a man!

Ah, i get the point.

Sorry for the double post.

Originally Posted by curiosity_kills_the_cat

Sorry for the double post.

Double the pleasure,Double the fun
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Doug,

I would have to thoroughly and critically look at your entire body of work to see if this is still my 'favorite'.

What I LOVE @ it is the chorus-- for the first time i actually 'sung' this piece of work, instead of just reading it. It is most. def. an excellent song- the rhythm is there, the beat is there, the chorus is there- this song has the ingredients to be a great pop song!

Yes, I do love it..one of the reasons I love it is b/c it is written using "I" statements. This beckons the reader in and keeps them focused through the entire song and gives them a glimpse into who YOU, AS A PERSON, NOT AS A SONGWRITER, are!!

That level of honesty, vulnerability, and transparency is very attractive to readers b/c they can RELATE to you- this is a reason that this one could be a hit, the more relate-able you are to an audience, the more popular the song is.

Jess

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

But,I'm still a man!

If you don't mind Doug, I'd like to answer this- from my perspective, of course, I, in no way, am trying to put words in your mouth, but I think a little BIO. on you could help others really get this song.

Others,
I have known Doug for over 10 years- in that time- he got to witness my 'lovely, classy, and graceful' (LOL!!!) transition from rebellious punk rock teen to, well, let's just put it this way- have any of you ever seen "Bad Girls Club Miami, LA, etc"? Yeah, that was me- and Doug saw it all. The point being in that entire turbulent time of my life, Doug was my rock, my stability. He knew who he was, had self confidence and self esteem that came from within.

Doug has never and will never give up on love...he has come to a point in his life where he is completely fine with being alone (not to be confused with 'lonely') He's very laidback... if he were to meet the right person, he'd take it one day, one hour, one moment at a time and see where it goes...

He is not bitter or vengeful- he uses humor to mask his pain- but, no, Doug has not given up on love, he's given up on SEARCHING for something that does not exist- and that's just called being mature

thanks,
Jessie

Originally Posted by jessie zuppo

Doug,

I would have to thoroughly and critically look at your entire body of work to see if this is still my 'favorite'.

What I LOVE @ it is the chorus-- for the first time i actually 'sung' this piece of work, instead of just reading it. It is most. def. an excellent song- the rhythm is there, the beat is there, the chorus is there- this song has the ingredients to be a great pop song!
Yes, I do love it..one of the reasons I love it is b/c it is written using "I" statements. This beckons the reader in and keeps them focused through the entire song and gives them a glimpse into who YOU, AS A PERSON, NOT AS A SONGWRITER, are!!!
That level of honesty, vulnerability, and transparency is very attractive to readers b/c they can RELATE to you- this is a reason that
this one could be a hit, the more relate-able you are to an audience, the more popular the song is.

Jess

When Wild West Jess gives this kind of response......I'm speechless!You,like Frankie Jasmine before you,give the best critiques I've ever read.I think this used to be your favorite song of mine because i put myself down and at the time that appealed to you!It's one of my favorites too,and I hope to record this someday soon.Thanks again for the critique!Also,thanks for "Liking" my Doublemint Remark.I'm glad at least someone gets the joke!

this is pretty sweet dude, theres several lines in here that I can personally relate to, it seems really legit, stay real bro

I thought I would give you some likes Doug!!!! I still love this song a true testament to my own life.

Doug, if you have a wish list songs you'd like to set to music, I'd put this one on top. it's like the emotion builds up in the verses and then it is released full throttle in the chorus. I'm thinking of songs like Nirvana's Smells Like Teen Spirit or Boston's More Than a Feeling. Melodious and subdued verses, an explosion of raw power in the choruses.

Originally Posted by MrGore

this is pretty sweet dude, theres several lines in here that I can personally relate to, it seems really legit, stay real bro

Thanks MG!You,like me,seem to be two separate indenities.I mean in your writing style.I write the "silly love songs" and also some weird Westerns.I'm glad you replied on this,one of my favorite songs I've written.

Originally Posted by Johnb31

I thought I would give you some likes Doug!!!! I still love this song a true testament to my own life.

Yeah,John when I saw the "17 Notifications" overnight,and hadn't written anything new,I thought I must have struck a chord in one of my "comments"!It was just you,"liking"every reply on this thread!Thanks,dude

Originally Posted by Peter Both

Doug, if you have a wish list songs you'd like to set to music, I'd put this one on top. it's like the emotion builds up in the verses and then it is released full throttle in the chorus. I'm thinking of songs like Nirvana's Smells Like Teen Spirit or Boston's More Than a Feeling. Melodious and subdued verses, an explosion of raw power in the choruses.

Thanks,Peter,that is high praise.I think one reason people "like" this piece is I "explained" how it's to be sung.This is always a big plus,at least to me.Most of my songs have been performed by my various bands and guitar players.After not playing in a band,for a long while,I decided to post them here.I hope I'll be able to record a couple soon,as they have great music to accompany the lyrics I wrote.

Doug, is this your Most-Replied-To Song??? ...
Also, looks as though this song and others of yours are getting a resurgence! PLUS you continue to make engaging new ones, like French Fry Cool ....

Originally Posted by Frankie Jasmine

Doug, is this your Most-Replied-To Song??? ...
Also, looks as though this song and others of yours are getting a resurgence! PLUS you continue to make engaging new ones, like French Fry Cool ....

No,"Honesty" is....by a long shot!Well,YOU finally gave a reply!This was one of the few you didn't comment on!What can I say?It rings true with a lot of people!I hope you read your shout out on comment #30!!

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

No,"Honesty" is....by a long shot!Well,YOU finally gave a reply!This was one of the few you didn't comment on!What can I say?It rings true with a lot of people!I hope you read your shout out on comment #30!!

Shout out duly received. Thanks, Doug.

Let's see if anybody else wants to comment..........