Too real

Yeah..

Flashback...

The sky is clear and it's summer dear
And my friends are near and there's *****es here
And I'm far from home but I'm in my zone
And my cup is full and I'm feelin' gone
And there's not a care left in the world
It's like there's no one here except my girl
They could care less bout your ****in' fears
Cuz we stackin' money it's crystal clear
So whatchu doin' up in my ear
You ain't wanted near so get outta here

Now flashforward like three four years
And I see you struggle and I heard it's on
You stuck on loop like same sad song
So I gave a hand I coulda left alone
But I see you cryin' all on your own
So I lift you up and I drove you home
I know it's bad you say no one's home

So you bring me in
Get poured up
Say you in the mood to get tore up
Just bought some purp al'ready rolled up
Super stacked and double cupped
Bring it back and bring it up
She's talkin' like she's all messed up
The past is past and that says enough
We left it there that's good enough
You heard I'm hustlin' well true enough
I built this house from the floor up
I'll be goddamned you gon' tear it up
So I drink my drink an' I've heard enough
So I leave you here yeah life gets tough

So time pass like an hour glass
And our lives last like a bright flash
You only pose once so you might grasp
But I heard some'in I didn't care
Like it was said wrong, one o' my worst fears
I heard you long gone like napalm
I said hell no that's dead wrong
So I drove by and you ain't home
I went to your sister's and she burst to tears
Said she ain't seen me like two whole years
Said you talked about me and thought about me
First you wanted payback like ali-mony
Then you get depressed nothin' without me
I said hold on don't gimmie that weight
Cuz love is fine till it turns to hate
She said I was in the note found much too late
Said I gotta go now it's gettin' late
And her sister hugged me one last time
And I thought of just the life rewind
If I'd've known I'd've stayed like one more time
But maybe it've made no difference
Cuz fate is fate we don't split the difference
I would've played like interference
But now it's too late it's all to clear it's
So sad but couldn't've been me
Like too bad we'll never see
I still think about you like rest in peace
And you're missed forever yes indeed
And you knew that it's upsettin' me
Even though I move on there's a part of me
That's missin buried deep with you
And I'm sorry I didn't understand you too
But it's too late what can I do
Damn...
Said it's too late nothing I can do

[TRACK 2]

Time moves on train tracks
Lost youth, miss it like a wayback
Uncouth, leanin' like a swayback
Untruth, drama rich like Maybach
I put my life on the line with every single rhyme
So emotional verses carry my woes like hearses
Woah - that's diverse-is like equal opportunity
They mad at my success like everybody suin' me
But you wouldn't get a dime cuz it's all in the mind
Each stroke run deep like Van Gogh on wine
So I count my due time til time's run out
And the fat lady sings and the curtain's pulled out
My girl lay like Tempurpedic but I'm sleepin' on the couch
And I'd tell ya what I mean but rather leave ya with some doubt
Then maybe you can relate..
Tell me why the world hate, tell me why it ain't great
Cuz they flexin' like they wit' me but I think it's too late
They didn't wade through **** like I did so homie please wait
We may both be at the top but I'm still the heavy weight
I may've started off worst but I finish off great
I got a few things dead on, made a lotta mistakes

Such is life... such is strife
Cuz pain is barely breathin' when they all be deceivin' and you're all outta strength but it's only early evenin'
And there's so much left to do, wouldn't put it past you, a hundred books to read and they all past due
Like they all passed you but it's all SNAFU
Situation normal, all ****ed up
You'd have to throw your life away to see what I gave up
And my friends are livin' life like the world keeps turnin' while I miss another night but the lamp still burnin'
Gimmie two more years when the tides be turnin'
Maybe not... am I wrong?
Am I wrong?
I got all the right reasons but now they all gone
I got all the right meanings but the song plays on
I just hope it's all worth it when it's all said 'n' done

I really like track two. I mean I do like track one but I think the story that you tell in track 2 is better. Good job man.

You have good story theme here, worthy of being real good but you need to polish the end rhymes. I tried to help with the first two or so stanzas without changing the meaning of anything, just to show you what I mean

The sky is clear and it's summer dear
And my friends are near and there's hunnies here
And I'm far from home but I'm in my zone
And my cup is full and I'm feelin' throwed
And there's not a care left in the world
It's like there's no one here except my girl
They could care less bout your frickin fears
Cuz we stackin' money it's crystal clear
So whatchu doin' loud in my ear
You ain't wanted near so bounce from here

Now flashforward like three four years
And I see you struggle and I heard it's on
You stuck on loop like same sad song
So I gave a hand I coulda left alone
But I see you cryin' all on your own
So I lift you up and I drove you home
I know it's bad you say no one's home

So you bring me in
Get poured up
Say you in the mood to get tore up
Just bought some purp al'ready rolled up
Super stacked and pro-fully cut
Bring it back and bring it up
She's talkin' like she's all ripped. Yeut
The past is past and that says enough
We left it there that's good enough
You heard I'm hustlin' well true enough
I built this house from the roots up
I'll be goddamned you gon' tear it up
So I drink my drink an' I've bared enough
So I leave you here yeah life gets tough

Night falls, another day lost
She ask me if I love her
Then she asks me if I'm lost
If I do this all because her
If she be the only cause
I wouldn't string her along on this ride that don't let off
I hate to waste my time but if she tells me it's on
Can I get five more minutes I look and then she's gone
Damn

Cuz life is only moments
No one here is perfect
Most of us are broken
Somehow we still do work it
Why we try so hard is to hide these scars
Lay folk don't get us like we be lost cause
But treat us like gods and some do play parts
They let it get to their brain...
Til they drunk offa power and they reason's ain't the same
But you run your mouth too far you end up red wine stain
Damn boy was smart blood spilt what shame
I know his grandmomma cryin' but it's one big game
If you can't ante up get the **** off the train
Cuz the steam blows on when you off or on
And the band plays on when we all be gone

Drinkin' wine while I recollect
Spendin' time on some new regrets
Pray to God but my faith is shaky
Wish they would boy try and make me
Until there's nothin' less to do
You can waste your whole life til there's nothin' left to prove
Best to dodge all the fakes homie just be you
When they stop and they stare homie just be cool
You know you're doin' somethin' right when they just hate you
For no damn reason
And you ball so hard even when it's off season
You got no damn boss how the **** they call it treason
Lil homie buck up we're here for the same damn reason
I came up all in it ain't enough to break even

Truly rose from the top
Used to clean they **** better get a mop
Now they kiss my *** please do not call me doc
Just treat me like an equal yes I still hate cops
Don't anymore blow weed but I will one day
I still drink cheap wine I still shoot Jose
Only if it's street ball will I still come play
Only when the street calls now I do look away
I got too much to lose just to give it all away
But I got the same mentality hustle every day
Take some time to relax or your life's just a waste
Always stay humble cuz there's always more to say
We may feel like kings but we were pawns just to play
And my bills stack high cuz you gotta pay to play

But when all's said done and the curtain draws in
And we finally forgiven for every last sin
And summertime's gone and winter sets in
Smoke blows out our mouths and you're dyin' to give in
Cuddle up lil mama we can re-begin
Old friends need favors but I will lend hands
Money won't change me ever please don't pretend
And when old age comes I'll look back on all this
Know that I did right even if it's hard to say
That's a long time away but for now I'll say
Keep your focus on point feet stay on ground
Wasn't born king but one day will be crowned
Been a long time comin' what is lost's finally found

Damn
Almost forget what it was to feel alive
Cuz misery this deep's like suicide
I'd love to explain but wait nevermind
Suffice to say pain's all in the mind
Rainy in door days but sunny outside
Yeh
Rainy in door but sunny outside...

**** you think you know
Ain't really my homie
Got my ****** back mother mother****** show me
Blood, pain, tears drain, night saves, dazed pain
Ain't confused about denial
Years since seen a smile
Could be here a while
Oh
Straight from the cusp
No pad no pen put the words straight up
Cuz the world's a reflection of what we gave up
What we saved up
Take that to the bank
Cuz days won't return no matter how hard you thank

love every one of them, good stuff

Lucky one, lucky one

Lucky one, lucky one

Lucky one, lucky one

He got a good life
Home cooked meal
Girls from the neighborhood always keep it real
Only sips Ciroc for the easy numbin' feel
Only smokes kush like it's no big deal
Disappointment doesn't know the feel
Dad's a CEO made a real good deal
Brand new Porsche first car at a steal
Damn
Ivy league school
Ivy league tool
Ain't sweatin' debt and ain't sweatin' school
He don't try with girls like he's already laid
He don't know Sallie Mae school already paid
Plus he goes just to be social he ain't worried bout grades
Got a cush job lined up with really great pay
Shows up late plus he really can't stay
Got his day planned out with golf right at three
Vacation with the wifey, damn it must be nice, He a

Lucky one, lucky one

Lucky one, lucky one

Lucky one, lucky one

Dead end job, lame *** pay
Can't stand school so I guess I'll skip today
Know a fly *** girl that I watch from afar
Who'd prolly have a good laugh if she even saw my car
Got very few valuables plus I just got robbed
Bought some brand new weed but it's all stem 'n seed
Got overcharged by a guy who can't even read
Got ticketed today plus I can't pay my deed
Means I can't pay my rent and my check already spent
And I owe all my friends cash so I can't ask them
Never knew better so I don't understand
But there's gotta be more that I can't comprehend
Sick of the struggle so I gotta hatch a plan
With jealousy eyes wishin' I was one of them
They the

Lucky one, lucky one

Lucky one, lucky one

Lucky one, lucky one

But nothin' stays gold or so the sayin' goes
And his two beach houses even growin' old
Plus his girl on the side tellin' him she gotta go
Got a modellin' gig and the ticket's been sold
And his wife fed up he can see that she knows
Plus he's tired of golf and his job's left him bored
Never got close to god like he'd rather pray to gold
As his youth fades away he tells himself at least he gettin' paid
But the summer's gone cold, years gone like they stoled
And his friends're all fake lately they just flake
His kids at private school so he alone eatin' steak
Filet mingon but what's gone wrong
Didn't know what's at stake as he does a double take
To a life gone wrong easy come easy go
Didn't appreciate it then nor now that it's cold
Funny sometimes how this life unfolds
He just doesn't understand because he was always told
He a

Lucky one, lucky one

Lucky one, lucky one

Lucky one, lucky one

As the years passed by I dreamed of a cup
That run overfloweth but I gotta fill it up
So I worked to the bone still wasn't enough
Hustle on late night when they wakin' up for the day
My night just endin' but these years paved the way
Got that chance one in a million my dues already paid
So I hopped on that plane, rolled the dice again
Got a sick tight crew that told me push on
Now my old life's a memory that it feel long gone
But I cherish those years cuz they made me today
Sometimes you go through dirt but a diamond in the grain
Got a badass girl who was there when I was poor
So she can bet her tight *** she'll stay around that it's made
Now I ain't really ain't a prophet but my momma used to say
Keep your head up kid cuz you'll see one day
You a

Lucky one, lucky one

Lucky one, lucky one

Lucky one, lucky one

I heard you said you think you know me
Through the grapevine but all yo' friends are super phony
And your best girlfriend told me she super lonely
Came my way, sayin' 'that you need to hold me'
So some friendship..
Cuz your best friend wanna be my *****
All these back stabbers, better stay equipped
But I told your girl pass
Cuz your whole crew is petty I ain't livin' in the past
I'm just livin' in the moment but the moments' movin' fast
If you ever plan to last then you better watch your back
All this time wasted gossip got you off track

I know you talk **** - you believe that it's true?
You mad that I made it, without you?
I always knew that I'd be hated, just not by you
So uncouth and so uncool
But to think you'd be mine forever - ****.. just not true
Just not true..

You said not to piss you off
But I love to play with fire
And if we ever reconciled it'd be all your heart desire
Grab the J and pass the lighter
But the day that we'll be friends is when one of us expires

Damn
See some things beyond control
But before I waste my youth I just learn to let it go
Cuz nothin' like remorse in addition growin' old
So I held my head up high as I turned around to go
And you got way too much pride to ever stop me at the door
But before I go outside I just want to let you know
That one day when you grow up, man I swear you gonna blow up
And you really on my nerves but one thing that I'm so sho' of
Is you a star, you a star, you a star..


You feel me
Hey, next time you light one.. and I know you still light one..
Take a hit for me..

You feel me? What it is..
Alright. I'm out.

Alright... this song is called 'whatever happened'... and it goes like...

a-hem..

and the beat drops

Damn
What ever happened to hood dreams and nice things
Girls skin soft like skin cream and taste just like ice cream
And can't do the right thing, oh what will tonight bring...
We were livin' in a pipe dream
Funny what this life brings
How what we anticipated never came for what we waited
And the greatest of achievements grew right out what we'd mistaken
What we took unto ourselves because we grew so sick of waitin'
And now they'll never hold us down because without them yeah we made it
And I guess I'm feelin' proud for this moment I've been anxious
Too bad you're not around cuz it would've been the greatest

Oh... and just so ya'll know..
when I say pipe things I mean kush dreams
Like load another pipe thing, bong is just the icing
We were livin' in a night dream, we were chillin' for a moment
Then I woke up to the right thing
It can be so frightening but I made my move like lightning
And I never looked back,
I never said when,
I made my own path,
I lost too many friends
But if you don't think I'm comin' back you never hearda second wind
This life can pass you by, you can't freeze it you can't hold it
And I hate to be surprised but I guess I'd like to spoil it
For the day you shine like star and all your glow is golden
And I think about our days and all of our enjoyment
That's a shout out to the days that we struggled unemployment

Yo this song goes out to old friends
Don't pretend it if ya weren't though
It hurts though yes I know so, but the ones I'd take my shirt for
Who always had my back and who'd never let me down
Who'd carry me in fact if I was beefin' with the ground
Just know you never left my thoughts even though I'm not around

Plus I'm high right now
If you ask me why right now
I'm just doin' me like I'm the guy right now
And the storm is never calm we in the eye right now
Guess I should move on I'm in the sky right now
And it's bright right now so light one right now, ha

This one goes out to never-was
Excuses man excuses to the ones who were not just because
Man this life can be so ruthless, this rhyme can be so truthness
The timing right, the limelight, the we can do this all night
But you'll never grow if you don't know exactly where your roots is

Ah
What. Ever. Happened.
To my homies from my past days
To old *** ex's and people from my past ways
Do they ever wonder, are they still up in the fast lane
Guess I'll never know like exactly what this rap says
Ha

Fresh stuff man. I always admire your song lyrics, they're filled with soul and character. I usually tend to prefer more extended multi syllable rhymes and internals, but your phrasing and syllable placement make up for it. you seem really comfortable and decisive in the use of your style, it shows in a good way.

Thanks bro!

Livin' life on see through til the day we bleed through
Never let 'em beat you 'specially when they need you
Life is in the moment can neither capture nor control it
And the second that you do, don't know which way it goin'
But if we livin' in the moment
Just like to say that I'm thankful for everything, everything? everything.
****...
And I love it when you show it, can see the way you glowin'

Diamond flow, go so hard, life fly by, kaleidoscope
We fly so high I swear we need a parachute to baillll
And if any other hatin' on us they can burn in haelllll
And they steady off the radar but I swear it never failllls
Like they wanna walk up on it when they wasn't puttin' work in
Mortal sin, lesson one: fly-by-sun, will get burned
Plus you always stressin' one, that's why you're always lesser son
Oooh...


And that's why you fail to go harda..
You a dealin' with a grown man partna