'Over-sea chemical lines' - 8/29/12

This is just a verse. I write in the real life hip hop field so please take into account that my personal rhythm will be a hit or miss to most of you song writers.
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8/28/12

I was born with a special mental drive..
Before I could walk obsession with the pencil thrived.
So I write of what's taught today, lots sought after vengeful crimes.
We preach the law but yet it rots in resentful times.
Seem tall when we all fought for several lies..
Oversea chemical lines have us losing credible lives.
Respectable guys refusing medical cries.
Spectacles blind as rising decibals wine.
The dead lead an ethical demise.
While of whom's left seem plentifully skeptical inside.
The enemies have flexible ties.
None expected to die when we were sent to 'fend for our pride'.
Come home alive or be smitten in stride.
Life is what you make of it - but ours were taken and given to the fight.

Take care.
- Nicholas

8/28/12

..I start to ex-e-cute my rhymes..
..then disreputen gods of destined proof rest the truth in the light..
My hew ruins sight of the fluently blind..
Now some think I'm 'tedious'.. but you'll see I'm losing my mind.
And God help the fittest who aren't suited to find..
My mind.. - they've yet to seen one as intrusive as mine.
I move through the hide and control movements made and,
end the earth then remake it in numerous places.
My play-set's like a poets blooming oasis..
I'd set fire to my words to contain luminous phrases.
In a blink of an eye I reduce disputants to particles.
Compared to my rise the women's movement is marginal.
My rhymes are a ruthless arsenal.
Skill set like an electric drill head, my youth is rechargeable.
And when it comes to bare the proof is remarkable.
Knowledge is faith so I took therapy and threw it to a Cardinal.

Take care.
-Nicholas

8/28/12

My lines are brighter than ever..
I drop kicked the sun and the light ignited my sweater.
I designed the feather - then untied the teller.
Carved my name in the sky so it'd be enshrined forever.
When carbon's pressured diamonds fester..
so I face critics and take the image of a timeless treasure.
If I died we'd be minus a violence beggar.
I dig holes in the ground like I were down to find the center.

Take care.
-Nicholas

8/29/12

Emotional baggage is tying me down.
But I'll hop in the ocean and swim laps around long island sound.
Jump out then stabilize the entire town.
Wash away my sins in cidar and shiners and let all the liars drown.
Find out from the smell that my lips are steaming.
Sleep on me.. I'll be the 'thorn in your side' 'til you 'quit dreaming'.
I have split feelings and they scrap for my soul like hundreds.
Track a fight scene strap bikes to my feet and 'roll with the punches'.

Take care
-Nicholas

I still have one foot in the rap/hip-hop world (well at least a couple of toes lol) and i especially still love to pull up a fat Tech N9ne saga every now and then. This is a great read, i think you have something really good going here and obviously you have some very well developed skills. Thank you for sharing this one

Haha yes who doesn't like a good tech n9ne session, good taste
Thank you for the nice comment I appreciate it. Do you have any material you would like me to read? On the 'you scratch mine I'll scratch yours' basis

yvw and thank you altho it's defo not necessary. i saw that you found one that i just posted and these are my only other 2...i'm totally a beginner, i never could write anything worthwhile in my whole life

http://www.allthelyrics.com/forum/ly...your-eyes.html

My bf posted this for me in Poetry when i didn't have enough nerve to do it myself
http://www.allthelyrics.com/forum/po...ly-summer.html