Tom's Motivation:

Title: Tom's Motivation
Artist: Tom Foola
Label: No

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http://www.hulkshare.com/2xdmn5c0ggxs#

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Lyrics:

I came back
to writing lyrics
I was never good at the start
but I still haven't reached the
end of my limits
there are way too many ways
I can finish
my potential is hidden
I'm seeking out and destroying my inner menace
you can sit and grimace
or work until you bleed
to get money guaranteed
only moved
by the will to survive
when you get a grand from the
hustle you develop the greed

my ex came back a year just to raise some hell
by me ;]
I get mocked at work everyday
Don't give a ****
no car so I walk home
but I still got 12 hours done
and I can add it up
everyday
while I weigh my negatives down
by 5 pounds of
solid clouds
good emotions so loud
I'm not even high,
even if I was it wouldn't feel right

I do this on my own
gotta save a dime if I'm on the road
sub-consciously
focusing in my zone
and the door to a studio is my destination
no other goals
just the next
second hungry and
patiently waitin'

yeuhh

production was the best part of this track. the beat wasn't something I'd choose to record with personally, but I've heard worse.

as far as your flow and delivery goes, again I've heard worse, but it was quite monotone... I didn't really feel any passion in any of it. lyrics are quite basic too. mostly monosyllabic rhymes, no use of any metaphors or similes. the flow was also very forced in parts, you extended a lot of syllables in order to make the fit the beat and cut others short instead of rewording the line or choosing a better fitting beat.

overall, I've heard worse but can't say I'm overly impressed either. you've got potential and should definitely hang around here. participate in the cyphers we've got going and the advice threads for writing rap lyrics and delivery techniques.