This is my first post for a good 5 months! I've been away writing hard, and working hard! And I have about 3 or 4 new songs to share with you guys. This one is called 'In The Summer'. When I wrote it I was listening to the band Ash alot and I was fascinated by their song 'Walking Barefoot' and how they made the song sound 'summer-y' when the lyrics were about something totally different. The song, both musically and lyrically, has a summer feel to it.
Walking along the sandy beach
Throwing pebbles into the sea
This is what makes our summer
This is just you and me
Your soft hair blowing in the breeze
Nothing else will ever be this good
I just want time to freeze
So nothing could ever be so good
In the summer
I just wanted you and me
This is how I wanted it to be
All I wanted was you and me
In the summer
We shared the best times of our lives
Staying awake every night
Watching stars disappear into the night
As the day comes to a end
And the the sun swaps for a breezy wind
We head out hand in hand to see what the evening brings
We can forget any problems we had and leave them behind
In the summer
I just wanted you and me
This is how I wanted it to be
All I wanted was you and me
In the summer
We shared the best times of our lives
Staying awake every night
Watching stars disappear into the night
In the summer
I just wanted you and me
This is how I wanted it to be
All I wanted was you and me
In the summer
We shared the best times of our lives
Staying awake every night
Watching stars disappear into the night
FAAAAN-TAStik. First thing was that I like the way you wrapped this around:
Nothing else will ever be this good
I just want time to freeze
So nothing could ever be so good
But the whole thing has some good flow and texture, and it brings to mind 1 or 2 great "summer songs" I've heard and loved over the years.
I would just recommend finding some way to change "night" in one of the last 2 lines of the chorus... light, twilight, delight, right, alright, wish I might? But even as it is, get it on vinyl and make it spin
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Hey, thanks for the feedback! Anyways good to know what people think. I had trouble with the chorus while writing it, especially the last two lines! After a quick think, I can probably change the last two lines to "staying awake every night, watching stars turning the darkness light/ bright?