When I hear that song I can't help thinking about those heartbreaking scenes in 'Bangkok Hilton' (with Nicole Kidman)
I only heard the song after she passed.It always reminds me of the postscript of her life.
(Janis Joplin)
Last edited by Doug Denslowe; 02-13-2013 at 10:11 AM.
There's not a sadder place on Earth than Bangkok HiltonAfter that you'd like to skip materialism for good,lol
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Up for second look.................
Dougie,
I recently saw a post that you stated you had 44 songs posted online...! I've only read and critiqued a handful of those, so I did a little digging and I found this gem! Wow and the fact that it was written in 2005 is even more amazing. As a song, you killed it! The repeating verse is very catchy and you stay committed to it. In fact, you commit through the whole song. This is the type of conviction I'm used to seeing in your writing. I hesitate to say that perhaps you were more footloose and free at that time b/c you wrote for yourself and close friends only. Your writing now is super, don't get me wrong...but I feel a spark, a passion, and a drive in this song that seems to be more reserved in your more recent songs.Does that make sense?
I LOVE THE STANZA
Only date models
with the silkiest hair
even my chauffeur
is a millionaire
This is similar to my own style of rhyme- free verse
Your writing to date is way, way above average and worthy of being a hit...I just feel something in this piece that emoted a passion for writing.
Well done!
Wild West Jess