Better Days

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  1. Zakynthos said:

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    Last edited by Zakynthos; 04-21-2020 at 12:56 PM.
     
  2. Jim Colyer's Avatar

    Jim Colyer said:

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    I recorded with a guy a while back who had a song called "Better Day." Your song is better than his.
    Jim Colyer Girl albums
     
  3. Zakynthos said:

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    Thanks Jim. I was thinking about changing the title but couldn't find anything good. Any suggestions?
     
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    Frankie Jasmine said:

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    OWO (One Woman's Opinion): The title is fine. The poem is about seeking better days, how to find better days, how to avoid falling to worse days; so the title fits to me.

    I like the rhythm of "Better Days," Zak. Very, very nice. I even like the way the word "obstacle" stands out (as we say, "like a sore thumb"!) because it emphasizes the consternation/frustration of a person being an obstacle--sticking out, in the way, an intrusion, so to speak. However, I understand and hear also the love-hate theme!!

    Very good, Zak!
     
  5. Zakynthos said:

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    Fran Thanks again. I feel obliged to comment back on your lyrics. However, I'm watching other members' activity silently, just didn't have the chance or enough time to leave a comment.
     
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    Kerri Faye Yates said:

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    I came to reread this and fell in love all over again!
    ~Kerri Faye
     
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    coral834 said:

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    I really like this...when I read it. I get a Justin Timberlake cry me a river feel in the verse then a hard crunchy but upbeat chorus.!! I may be all wrong in how it sounds...but absolutely love the way it sounds when i read it...

    Awesome job
    JeffCoralMuzic(YouTube.com)
     
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    Doug Denslowe said:

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    Any song that starts "What should I do?What should I do?"Has got my attention!If you're looking for another title..........I think that's it!
     
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    Kerri Faye Yates said:

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    Aaaand back to re-read a third time. I love this!
    ~Kerri Faye