The Highest Point - Song Made Before I had a Name

Song Link: http://www.hulkshare.com/6bligfv6io6n

Details: This was made when I just turned 16, basically this is (in my opinion) the best work I have ever done. I was thinking of using the name 'KoRoyce' but the name held no meaning, the only meaning, if you want to say, it had was to confuse others into thinking it actually had a meaning. Just showing this for review by some of the more intellectual virtues of this forum so I know where my standing was at that time.

Give me a minute to type the lyrics up I don't have them on paper but I can remember them just by listening.

Lyrics:
Fingers on a band
mind is on heartbreak
heart is in the gutter
plus they still don't know my name
no one ever gives a dam until the water floods
so I'ma be like moses,
I'm gonna water-front
I'm on a hunt for a girl
***** I lied
mary jane keeps me cummany
almost every night
full on armor like a knight
call me dark
no knife is in my back
cause I'm out deep like a shark
smell the hate like the blood
I'm swimming so far
they locked my out of space
too bright to be a star
dark star
I was the kid
looking out the window of the car
counting fake stars

Guilt is a ruthless killer
I am an assassin
if it comes to me
I'm prepared to slash it
Don't tell me about weakness
cause I never had it
keep your mouth shut
with the problems that you're having
try to defy
the doubt
stuck up in my mind
that ***** said she was sorry
I ever even lived life
I'm sorry that you don't
appreciate mine
you don't even gotta say **** to me
but it'll be alright

Chorus:
Cause I go to the highest point in my town
flick light under grain then I hold it down
people judge
but I don't give a ****
y'all,
y'all can still mug
y'all,
y'all can still mug

Usually I don't like alot of pieces on here, posted by people that come on ever so often just leaving petty, self focused works. But I actually enjoyed this. The first verse is unique. Very straight forward (sylobal count is off in spots) but the script is also creative, though doesn't stretch too far as to lose the plot or the 'plan'. Good; solid job for being done when you were only starting out, as you say.

Originally Posted by smoothtung

Usually I don't like alot of pieces on here, posted by people that come on ever so often just leaving petty, self focused works. But I actually enjoyed this. The first verse is unique. Very straight forward (sylobal count is off in spots) but the script is also creative, though doesn't stretch too far as to lose the plot or the 'plan'. Good; solid job for being done when you were only starting out, as you say.

Thank you man I'm trying my best to get back on the progress I had and even push the limits beyond that, and I usually have to focus on myself because my opinion doesn't count much on others since I have little too say if only through lyrics.

accidental double post