my only world!!

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    dark1979 said:

    Default my only world!!

    When I'm being
    there I do not
    know what
    happen to my
    soul. When I'm
    being
    standing there I
    do not
    know what my
    end will be... When
    I leave my world
    and come to yours ,I
    look at you from
    afar
    I thinking but my
    words get lost
    from my
    mind!!! I seeing you
    talking and
    laughing
    and walking with
    your
    friends!! Are they
    can understand
    you, to feel your
    soul,
    to care about you
    or love you??
    No one in
    your world can
    understand you or
    love you as I
    doing...
    no one... no one...
    Every time I be
    close from your
    place I would love
    watching you
    from afar. How
    much I wish to
    speak with you
    but I can
    not!! How much I
    wish telling
    you "I love you so
    much"
    but I can not do
    that!! there
    are things in
    your eyes calling
    me and saying
    close at me and
    speak with me but
    I can not do that
    do you know
    why?
    Because you are
    living in a
    different world!!
    Your
    world does not
    knows love, does
    not
    Knows good, hope,
    honesty,
    happiness, But in
    my world all of
    these things are
    exist and more... in
    the
    world who I live
    in... I
    can do anything I
    want...
    I can thinking and
    speaking and
    telling you "I love
    you so
    much" I can touch
    your hair, hold
    your hands, wipe
    your tears and feel
    you that you are
    the most beautiful
    girl in my world...
    Leave your sad
    world my
    darling and come
    with me to my
    happy world.
    What I can telling
    you about it.....It is
    not
    like yours,
    there is no fear...
    no pain...
    torment...
    Sadness... or
    crying... there in my
    world
    I will give you
    immortality and
    you will find the
    true love that you searh
    about it.
    Every time I
    leave my world
    and see you smile
    the happiness
    close from my
    heart.
    Every time I look
    at your eyes
    my heart beat.
    Every time I see
    you walk my
    hands tremble.
    Every time I see
    you moving
    away the sadness
    comes and
    touches my heart.
    Come
    now and leave
    your miserable
    world. I knowing
    everything about
    your life,
    about your
    childhood...
    your dreams...your
    feelings... I
    Knowing
    how you thinking.
    How you
    feeling.... I feel you
    when I go back
    to my world I
    knowing very
    well that you
    sometimes
    sit in your room
    and cry...
    How much I feel
    pain for you!! And how
    much I care about you!!
    Come
    now,
    my darling
    come...come with me,
    because in my
    world you will
    never cry.
    Heart of Steel....by manowar
     
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    amaryn said:

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    Hi, Darky! I especially like the last part "Come my darling,
    come ...come with me,
    because in my world
    you will never cry

    If you don't mind: there are some mistakes in your grammar,
    tell me if you allow me to correct them
    It will even look better after that, but I understand the meaning of
    your poem anyway: don't worry!
    Keep going
     
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    dark1979 said:

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    Quote Originally Posted by amaryn View Post

    If you don't mind: there are some mistakes in your grammar,
    tell me if you allow me to correct them
    It will even look better after that
    Thank you so much amaryn!!! I will be very happy, if you correct them.
    Heart of Steel....by manowar
     
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    amaryn said:

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    when I'm there I do not know what happens to my soul
    when I'm standing there I do not know what
    my end will be......

    I am thinking but my words get lost from my mind
    I see you talking.........
    Can they understand you., feel your soul, care about you
    or love you... like I do?

    every time I am close to your place...

    ..and speak to me, as if close to me

    ...but I can't respond and you know why? (PS: I think that's what you mean,Darky)

    ...your world does not know love..

    Darky: I am busy now, continue as soon as possible!

    THESE ARE SUGGESTIONS,DARKY! YOU MAY DISAGREE OF COURSE
    Last edited by amaryn; 09-24-2012 at 02:30 PM.
     
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    dark1979 said:

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    Please continue‏ ‏amaryn.....You
    understand the meaning
    of my poem very very will...The Poem is so better without mistakes....."now" I began feel my poem, Please
    continue....I do not have a problem take your time....
    Last edited by dark1979; 09-24-2012 at 02:32 PM.
    Heart of Steel....by manowar
     
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    amaryn said:

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    here we go again, Dark


    your world does not know what is good, what is hope, happiness
    but in my world all of these things exist...
    in the world which I live in.....

    I can think and speak and tell you....
    ...I can tell you you are the most beautiful girl in my world...

    what I can tell you about it....

    every time I look at your eyes my heart beats........

    I know how you think...

    I know very well how you sit in your room....


    HAVE FUN, DARK!
    ....