Skyfall

Ever since that day
The sky has gone astray
Floating away into space
As the world runs its final race

Where did the sky go?
Oh, Earth how could you let him go
The sky was such a nice fellow
He was always so mellow

But now he is gone
Who will turn this light on?
And illuminate a path to take
A way to calm the waters wake

Where have you gone sky?
How will our planes fly?
In this sky less, sky we are ground
With no where to go we are bound

To all of what we see
All we have left is our evaporating sea
On boats we shall travel
As life begins to unravel

Nothing seems right
As the world breaks into a fight
Bending and breaking
Under its own making

How can we be so apathetic?
Fighting over something so pathetic
Rather than focusing on the issues
And doing more than just wasting tissues

Where have you gone sky?
Why are you so shy?
Is it because we are living a lie?
And all the things we choose to deny

Will you ever come back?
And relieve us of our lack
Of drive and ability
Help us find our humility

Please return sky
So we can fly

This is great, and it has some nice originality bcs some of the lines almost seem frivolous but at the same time it all conveys a very serious message.

One very helpful clue that Moon gave me some months ago was to try and figure out what words may not be necessary in meaning, so that i could tkeep the meter as even as possible. if it were me i would leave out the word "something" at the end of the 7th verse. But i like it the way it is so it really doesn't matter

Yeah your right about the something.

mind = blown

this is even more extraordinary then you explained it to be. Im amazed. Its so good xD you're so good ;-)

John,
This reminded me of Chicken Little(?)the sky is falling,the sky is falling.When you can be compared to a Classic like that,I'd say that's good!Real good!

I changed the name of the poem to skyfall which I think fits the poem better because it means like a disaster of some sort.

I ab-so-lute-ly love this poem!!!!*

* This statement was in all caps, but the monitoring box reduced it to lower-case. Sorry! It deserves All Caps!