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    By the hand of the people il overthrow the government.
    Stubborn man prompt with a soul and a sovereign sense.
    Summon peasants;
    Essences watch backs of modern men.
    Illusion of presence is the haunting past that fathers them.
    I sign for the common pen, this is not farm ground.
    We are not livestock and won't let our guard down.
    Know that it starts now; the rise of the 99.
    The voted eat their hearts out we find that it's finally time.
    Finely dine one last occasion on ignorance.
    Then fall as all elite obsolete to a different.
    Envision a lyric thats straight up as the previous.
    Im told to have spirit when the elected are devious.
    Scheming pricks; superficial officials - the big dogs.
    Get our backs quick or we're officially p*ssed off.
    The buildings soot the Empire commanded by 'loyal' lip.
    Civilians of Iraq fight to only live.
    Oil rich; we'd drown gold back into earth crust.
    Twenty in gas doesn't go as far as herb does.

    Will continue
    Last edited by smoothtung; 10-25-2012 at 08:48 AM.

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    If you don't have recording equipment, get some. This is some crazy good **** dude. Your flow just does the whole piece a majestic favor. Keep this up, and please finish this piece quickly!

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    Thanks bro I'm appreciative. I don't own equipment yet but someday soon ill start to record all the pieces I've been working on.

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    And truely written lyrics get no love ^

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    this was some dope lyricism smooth. the way I read it lost flow a few times, but that's probably because of how I read it. can definitely see a natural cadence in there though. great message and some great imagery too. that last bar was dope. probably my fav of the piece just cuz it made me laugh a bit.

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