So small back story. Got close to a girl, both liked each other but didnt do anything about it. After leaving school she became addicted to drugs and we rarely speak now, so the song is about that
[Chorus]
Kept your picture in the frame long after it shattered
Guess it was a sight, though the picture was battered
Blew off the dust, remembered the times we had together
Sittin here, wondering why our love wasn't forever
[Verse 1]
I know its rare now that we actually chill out and talk
But even with that in mind, im the one person that'll never walk
Cus frankly, you've had more of an impact than you realise
I end up thanking god everytime i look in your eyes
My feelings got in the way, now im happy with you as a friend
And i'm gonna stay happy long as its something that we can mend
I'd never try to change you, your life is your own to steer
But just know if problems arise, you'll always have somebody here
Someone to go to if you feel alone in your darkest hours
See i understand that theres thorns in the most beautiful flowers
Society isn't kind, but don't worry your pretty mind
People always throw rocks at the things that shine
Going to start working on a second verse soon, tell me what you think
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Something Im working on. Feedback appreciated
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This is beautiful man, I felt that i could definitely relate to this. You have a good sense of rhythm and your end rhymes are put together nicely. Now try putting those end rhymes in the middle and see what comes out. thats the next step, also maybe some more elaborated words. Your on the right basic level, keep going.
-Muse -
Thanks for the feedback, so i took what you said in mind and heres the starting 4 lines to the next verse. Jus tell me if you think they'll work
Originally Posted by MuseHipHop
I knew it had to end, but i thought it'd be slow, but no
You slammed the brakes down and i took that ****in fatal blow
2 Months later im still stressing, borderline depression
Haunted by your presence and how you'd left me guessing -
Bang on man.