This is for my girl

Thread: This is for my girl

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  1. BterThanUrMom said:

    Post This is for my girl

    I swear you got me higher than a kite girl.
    I think I finally found the right girl.
    They told me love was non-existent, It will never happen.
    They told me my life was filled with a million distractions.
    A Dragon, is what people are comparing me to.
    Other *****s get distracted like talking to a person with a hair on their tooth.
    Well not me baby, I'm focused like a camera lens.
    I'm just tryin to get your love, and hopefully make amends
    To each and every mistake, and problem I have caused.
    I want to take this slow baby girl, press play, our relationship has been on pause.
    But your so much different than other people.
    It's love times two with you, like we're gonna make a sequel.
    You changed my vision to greatness I was stuck on that evil.
    Is it love without trust, being with you is a must, my love on overload, please don't let my heart bust.
    I don't know why, but I'm feeling kind of funny, this flow is enchanted.
    My hearts heavy with love, its low, you know I'm the one with the disadvantage.
    I try and stay up with love, but you got me beat to the point that I'm singing like a parakeet.
    Is love this good, I've never felt this right, is this real?
    How can my heart be so excited when we just chill?
    But damn, I'm done asking questions, your love is my first impression.
    Your never holding me back, this ain't no recession, in life, love is the most important lesson.
     
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    Venomonology said:

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    some nice ideas in here, I like your use of simile.. the piece would benefit from an internal scheme or a few more transitions though. only having the end rhymes in play makes it predictable, then it gets boring.

    keep up
     
  3. BterThanUrMom said:

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    Thanks always looking for the help