Louise

The snow is piling up on the pavements outside
The streets are deserted, it's the heyday of winter's pride
I'm walking faster 'cause I'll soon be there
I take a deep breath of the crispy wintry air
My feet are almost frozen as I enter the hall
With my hair full of snowflakes I take my place by the wall
And, oh, I feel so nervous when I spot you in the crowd
I wanna hear you talk but my friends are talking too loud

My hands are all sweaty, I go weak in my knees
It's the mute evidence of my love for Louise

Louise, I've got my mind made up
I wanna send our love to the very top
Louise, when I see you again
I don't know what to say, or what to do to you
Louise, it's the way that you smile
Oh, Louise, it's the way that you frown
Louise, get me on that southbound train and let me go
Go with you, to your hometown

And I almost forgot what it feels like
I almost forgot what it feels like
To be in love
With someone as wonderful as you

I wish it was longer.It's so dang good!.BRAVO!!

My first reaction to this was,"Another song with too long verses."But after giving it a chance,I changed my mind and I do like this.A lot.If you could tighten up a few of the longer lines,I think,you'd have a classic song.It's good as is,I think you could improve it to Great.

Peter, I like your wintry description; your liking a frown as well as a smile (clever); and metaphor (train, hometown). This raises "Louise" to a higher level love song, far surpassing "sappy" which love songs can be sometimes. Good job!