This is my First song titled "I Thought You Were My Fairytale"

Please tell me what you think!! Its about a breakup that my bff had with her best guy friend. He cheated on her which broke her heart and their friendship... here goes lol... oh and I am on a cellphone so sorry if the verses and chorus run together. If you see a comma its the end of a line and I will say verse 1 2 3 etc... 1st verse When I first looked in your eyes, I didn't see all your lies, Your smile was so sweet, How was I to know you would cheat, How could I have been so naive, Now its time for you to leave. Chorus I thought you were my fairy tale come true, Until the real you shown through, I thought you were my prince and I guess it just doesnt make sense, how you swept me off my feet, And led me to happily never after! Verse 2 It seems like just yesterday, We said hello goodbye, I knew someday we would come to an end, but I didnt know , I would lose a really good friend! Chorus I thought you were my fairytale come true, Until the real you shown through, I thought you were my prince and I guess it doesnt make sense, How you swept me off my feet, And led me to happily never after! Verse 3*I thought you were my hero, now your just a zero, we used to have so much fun, why'd you have to run, they say you will reap what you sow, now we will never know Chorus I thought you were my fairytale come true, Until the real you shown through, I thought you were my prince and I guess it doesnt make sense, How you swept me off my feet, And led me to happily never after!*Now I think its time for this fairytale to come to an end...... So what do you think??

i like it the chorus is catchy and your verses are quite meaningful, the only thing i couldn't really see was the beat

First lyrics?? Haha.lol,they are so very much awesome.I've just woken up and that was the first lyrics to read.WOW..goodwork...

Thanks I wrote it for my bff