your opinions

I haven't been able to write much of anything lyrically recently due to issues with the amount of spare time i have so which of these do you think would be worth working on?

#1
pretty little girl
so angry at the world
she says it s unfair, unfair, unfair
hiding under sheets
as im starring at my feet
she says its unfair, unfair, unfair
wordless I stay
with nothing left to say
she says its unfair, unfair, unfair

#2
locks and chains
weigh me down
sinking beneath
this worlds sound
lonely, lonely
no where bound
locks and chains
weigh me down\

#3
15 cuts
upon my wrists
15 years
in these eyes
15 days
until i die
15 times
left to cry

#4
she gaaaave me a handjob
she gave me a hanjob
right under the treeeee
she left me wanting
wanting for another
maybe from her mother
under, the treeeee

and thats all thanks for your time for reading this

Quit whining and practice your guitar!You can write after you learn to play!
Sincerely,
Daddy Dougie

Is there a difference between a "hanjob" and a "handjob" Sounds as if you need a 16th cut- the deepest

Originally Posted by amaryn

Is there a difference between a "handjob" and a "handjob" Sounds as if you need a 16th cut- the deepest

Huh?!?!

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

Huh?!?!

Lol I think there's a printing mistake in that poem/song: "hanjob" and "handjob".....

"15 cuts upon my wrists" reminds me of the song of Rod Stewart:"The First Cut Is The Deepest"

Although Philip is a good songwriter, his spelling is not his strong suit. I'm sure it was a misspelling.
Phil,check out comment #8.The man knows what he's talking about,I'd listen!

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

Although Philip is a good songwriter, his spelling is not his strong suit. I'm sure it was a misspelling.

I have long nails for guitar playing. I keep slipping off the keyboard here. This gives some interesting results at times and new words, piano playing I gave up all together
we're all human

Originally Posted by amaryn

I have long nails for guitar playing. I keep slipping off the keyboard here. This gives some interesting results at times and new words, piano playing I gave up all together
we're all human

I have played guitar for 20 years and have always kept my nails short (with biting!!) and cannot play guitar if my nails are any more than a few mm long, I don't use a plectrum either and fingerpick with the ends of my fingers instead...I find this easier. Horses for courses though...I also find the same with piano, fat stubs better than nails, they tend to get in the way!