seems to change

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  1. Matt6660 said:

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    i found this on on my phone and am not to sure about this piece.



    there is nothing left to say
    there is nothing left to feel
    in this world
    the days turn in to dusk
    as quickly as it starts

    theres nothing to give
    nothing to take
    we are all on our own
    and nothing seems to change.
    "seems to change"


    ive givin all that i am
    to keep moving on
    but am stuck facing
    stuck facing
    what lies ahead


    i keep going on the
    same path
    never knowing why
    it all ways leads back to you


    ive givin all that i am
    to keep moving on
    but am stuck facing
    stuck facing
    what lies ahead



    ive givin all that i am
    to keep moving on
    but am stuck facing
    stuck facing
    what lies ahead
     
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    Tania15 said:

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    I think it was ok. Maybe make the lines a little longer and add some more rhymes? It depends on the music, but thins is what I thought when reading the lyrics.
     
  3. Matt6660 said:

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    Ya I felt the same way. I play hard rock/ metal.
     
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    amaryn said:

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    heavy metal/rock do not usually depend upon long lyrics,lol,Matt. Without knowing the musicpiece it's hard to say whether more lyrics are needed or not.
    I don't feel a gap here... what do you mean by "you found this on your phone"? Is it not yours?
     
  5. Matt6660 said:

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    this is one of my pieces. I write them and forget to go back and edit them, which i forget to post also. i tend to write lyrics and and music for them. when i write i am thinking about the music and how this piece should sound when finished.