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In the dirt
Last edited by Tania15; 05-11-2013 at 11:10 AM.
The journey has begun. "Nothing safe is worth the drive." -
Um,i tend to think it's a Crash..far from that,you continue to amaze me.:-D..im glad we are partners at lyrics writing.
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Aww! Thank you! I'm glad we write together,too!
Originally Posted by Wilson
The journey has begun. "Nothing safe is worth the drive." -
Love the Chorus,especially.Good job,T.
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Thank you! Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe
The journey has begun. "Nothing safe is worth the drive."
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Tania, so you're copyrighting your songs just in case. Well, why not? It has your stamp, so you are entitled to!
The song has got guts, Tania. I'd say "smashes" in stead of "crushes" the way you "smash plates" for example.
A suggestion.
I notice something else: it is "wrapped around his finger", so: add one "p" there
and: "he breaks your heart" : not "break(e)s your heart".
I hope you don't mind,lol
Otherwise strong words, certainly accompanied by a vivid rhythm to underline these words.
A good chorus and an excellent title:"In the dirt" !
Well done, Tania!
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Thank you!
The journey has begun. "Nothing safe is worth the drive." -
Nice work. It often takes a third party or another woman to see a man for what he really is.
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Thank you! Originally Posted by Jim Colyer
The journey has begun. "Nothing safe is worth the drive."
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OMG I love this!
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Thank you a lot! Originally Posted by StripedSweater
The journey has begun. "Nothing safe is worth the drive."
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Thank you! What would you change? Originally Posted by RickeyJoe
Interesting song. I see no grammatical mistakes. There are a few phrases I would've worded differently but that's just me, everybody's different and you did a great job on this one. I applaud you. This is my favorite by you that I've read so far.The journey has begun. "Nothing safe is worth the drive."
