Something Good (In Time)

Verse one:
Lets pretend everything's fine..
Even though shes on your mind..
She weaves her way into your skin..
She's perfect, she might win..
Who am I to compare?

Chorus:
You may bat your eyes...
But your twisted in lies..
You're deceptive but discerning,
And you think you're so deserving,
of something good in time.

You may bite your lips..
And imagine your with him..
You've got to realize he's mine,
and go and find;
something good in time.

Verse two:
I may smile when you look back..
Even though you make me crack..
You weave your way into my skin,
You're perfect for him..
Who am I to compare?

Chorus:
You may bat your eyes...
But your twisted in lies..
You're deceptive but discerning,
And you think you're so deserving,
of something good in time.

You may bite your lips..
And imagine your with him..
You've got to realize he's mine,
and go and find;
something good in time.

Bridge:
I want this to end (I want this to end)
I dont want to be friends (Dont want to be friends)
I want this to end (I want this to end)
I dont want to be friends (Dont want to be friends)
I want this to end....

This has "Hit" written all over it.Now if only someone looking for material read it..............

Thank you, doug!

another beautiful line "she weaves her way into your skin" Traingirl: excellent!

I like this but am wondering if writing it from 1st person wouldn't be stronger...and You got all descriptive in the chorus... which doesn't answer why you are writing the song because the first 2 lines is what the song is about.

Cuz what I'm hearing is the boyfriend has got the hots for someone else but your still going out with him and know he has the hots for someone else, so you are singing this from your point of view. BUT then you talk to the girl in the chorus and tell her all the things she is doing to pull him in. Your verse and chorus don't go together. Who are you speaking to....cuz if both are standing in front of me this is not the conversation I would be having I'd be really really pissed off. thats not what this is saying.

Lets pretend everything's fine..
Even though shes on your mind..

I would change up who you are talking to

Like:

Lets pretend everything is fine
even after shes weaving her body through your mind
who can argue with perfection?
how can I win?

when shes batting her eyes
twisting you up in lies
where do I begin?

Not perfect but shows it can be tighter and easier to follow.

Thank you for your feedback but I will keep it the way I originally wrote it

Hey all comments are keep or sweep!

Yes ma'am! And I appreciate all critic. It helps me look at things differently, and examine my work

That's you on the train to Hollywood. Enough said.

Thank you so much

A well deserved compliment, Traingirl! And that phrase I love so much remains my favourite! ("she weaves her way into your skin")*

Thank you so much. I'm glad you like it dear! xx