Up The Mountains.

I woke up with a start
drenched in the light of the sun
Stepping unto uncharted territory
foraging for the right equipment
The path to tread,
a looming mystery.
My very next step,
a conundrum.
My confusion palpable
at the labyrithine course before me
then i espied
my compass,
your radiating smile.

Excellent, this was very good IMO. It served its small purpose, and fulfilled it flawlessly. Welcome to allthelyrics forum!

Originally Posted by Eccer

Excellent, this was very good IMO. It served its small purpose, and fulfilled it flawlessly. Welcome to allthelyrics forum!

Thanks for the comments, pls keep them coming. Well said Eccer, but i think people prefer long poems.

The length inspired my Azure Eyes poem.you definitely have your own style!

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

The length inspired my Azure Eyes poem.you definitely have your own style!

Doug, thanks for the acknowledgement. & i think it's a chain, 'Azure eyes' got me thinking about a series of short descriptive lines...

sure, Curiosity, odd you say people prefer long poems; I disagree- this little jewel of yours proves you wrong per sé

"then I espied my compass, your radiating smile"

Originally Posted by amaryn

sure, Curiosity, odd you say people prefer long poems; I disagree- this little jewel of yours proves you wrong per sé

"then I espied my compass, your radiating smile"

Thanks for believing in these lines' ability to communicate... Is that the line you like?

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

The length inspired my Azure Eyes poem.you definitely have your own style!

No, Dougg. You have a definitive style of your own. Always refreshing to view your work.

(Are you also an instrumentalist?) Just curious

Originally Posted by curiosity_kills_the_cat

No, Dougg. You have a definitive style of your own. Always refreshing to view your work.

(Are you also an instrumentalist?) Just curious

I've played Drums my entire life.When I was a child I used to "bounce"my head on my pillow to go to sleep.I'm always aware of the "beat"in anything I do.I'm very concisious of rhythm in life itself.

Curiosity! How nice to see you! I was getting worried daily life got totally hold of you

@Doug: I strongly can feel like you, though I play guitar and sing. Without rhythm (a whole scale of them) it's impossible to play, compose, write lyrics.

Originally Posted by amaryn

Curiosity! How nice to see you! I was getting worried daily life got totally hold of you

@Doug: I strongly can feel like you, though I play guitar and sing. Without rhythm (a whole scale of them) it's impossible to play, compose, write lyrics.

Hugs for both of you...so glad to read from you.

I sure want to learn to play one or two instruments... very interested

Pick up a stick.......pound on any surface.........you are now a drummer!

Drumming is not as easy as it looks, & more often than not, the drummer makes the band.

Originally Posted by curiosity_kills_the_cat

Drumming is not as easy as it looks, & more often than not, the drummer makes the band.

I should have know that I couldn't get that pass you!If you got a good drummer,even a mediocre band sounds good.If you have a great drummer,it makes a good band sound great!

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

I should have know that I couldn't get that pass you!If you got a good drummer,even a mediocre band sounds good.If you have a great drummer,it makes a good band sound great!

Now all i need is a great drummer -voila! I'll go platinum.(hopefully0