Hope

This is another of my shorter songs. i am looking for all comments.. they are the building blocks of great lyrics with out it we just dont know.

Hopeless

fills the heart
and slowly fades away
i am not holding back
i will soon let go

I have nothing left to fight
i have giving it all
i have little time
till i fade away

There is nothing to hold
there's nothing left to save
i am broken
bitter and hopeless
(hopeless)

Matt;
This is interesting.I'd use it,all three verses as a chorus.Now all you have to do is write some great verses to go with it.I think you're on the right track,but don't rush it,take your time and come up with something that compliments the lines you already have.

I was just going with it last night as i was writing, and it reminded me of the other song i did "fallen" i believe.

i am also getting ove writers block so this helps out alot. i will create some good verse for this piece.

Its good..try to add a bridge and then end with chorus

yes, i am working on a few verses for this piece. glad to hear you liked it!