Broken heart

Thread: Broken heart

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  1. ouss16041988 said:

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    you don't know the meaning of being rejected

    you don't know the meaning of being ignored

    I trust in you how could you do this to me

    [chorus]

    Do you wanna see me cry again

    Do you wanna see me sad again



    How can I smile after you’re gone

    How can I be happy after you’re gone

    I don’t know what to do

    I don’t know what to say to you

    [chorus]



    please don’t break my heart again

    please dont't make me suffer again
    Last edited by ouss16041988; 01-03-2015 at 06:46 AM.
     
  2. Doug Denslowe's Avatar

    Doug Denslowe said:

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    This is a good start.I think what you've got is a great chorus.If you could write verses to compliment this,it could be a great song.
     
  3. ouss16041988 said:

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    thx i'll try
     
  4. ouss16041988 said:

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    Hi this is a modified lyrics

    verses
    Why love is easy to get in and hard to get out
    why it hurt so much

    I can't forgive you and I don’t know why
    I can forgive you and I don’t know how

    I just want to known that you still love me
    I just want to know that you still want me

    I wish you could save me
    I wish you could love me as I love you

    How can I get closer without you get far

    I wish I could forget you

    I wish I could forgive you

    You let a huge damage in my heart
    I’m falling I’m gone anyway

    I saw you leaving without saying any word

    my heart can't stop beating

    all that i know is waiting

    there is nothing to lose
    i can't give up easily

    i know it's hard to believe but it's true
     
  5. Doug Denslowe's Avatar

    Doug Denslowe said:

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    Better.I still think you could improve it.It's almost there,keep on trying.Try to find verses/chorus so it's structured more like Song Lyrics.
     
  6. Wilson said:

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    Yeah,Doug is 100% right..
     
  7. ouss16041988 said:

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    [verses]
    you don't the meaning of being rejected

    you don't the meaning of being ignored

    I wish you could save me

    I wish you could love me

    [chorus]

    Do you wanna see me cry again

    Do you wanna see me sad again

    [verses]
    How can I smile after you’re gone

    How can I be happy after you’re gone

    I don’t know what to do

    I don’t know what to say to you

    [chorus]



    please don’t break my heart again

    please dont't make me suffer again
     
  8. ouss16041988 said:

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    thx for like wilson