"black hart"

this is my first ever try at wiring lyrics
it comes out of a very lonely period im having , i hope you like it and i will be very happy to hear comments.

i named this one "black heart"

Broken, beaten,
Floating at the sea alone
No land in sight, no hope for survival

A red heart
Routing,
Turned black, black as the night sky

A warm hart
Alone
Turned cold, cold as ice


And this fire burns, burns in side
Turning coal to diamonds
And inside the jewel
Hiding from sight
Slowly growing, waiting
Waiting for the moment
To burst out, burst out!

A ticking time bomb
Growing and growing
Scared, frightened
With no end in sight
On the edge of the knife
Waiting to explode!

Will someone save me?
Save me from my self
So much to give
So much to lose

Waiting for my savior
The savior who will turn my black heart
Red again.

Hmmmm, is this about a deer, or is just a misspelling of heart? Anyways, this was good. Considering it's your first time Feels good to let it out eh? You have good imagery so stick with that, and keep writing. There's potential to greatness here!

ya its a misspell i corrected it , thank you