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Last edited by Tania15; 05-11-2013 at 11:10 AM. Reason: Typo
The journey has begun. "Nothing safe is worth the drive."
Hi, Tania
It is "tore", not "tored" apart,lol
"cliché " really needs the accent on the "e"
"cuz" is grammatically not correct: it's either" 'cause" or "because"
I would also rather see you write :
"and if you left me thinking this thing wouldn't affect
me you're wrong"
these things- as you asked for a little help,lol
to connect black with hate and white with love seems a bit unfair as regards black people, don't you think?
Haha! Oh,ok! Thank you! I'll edit.
I didn't think about the whole "Hate is black and love is white" thing,but now that you mentioned it, I can totally see it. My bad. I'll change that. Thanks again!
The journey has begun. "Nothing safe is worth the drive."
Love the chorus especially.I totally disagree with my good friend Amaryn.I didn't put the same thought on the black/white issue.it never occurred to me you meant skin color,not in a million years!I took it to mean opposite sides of the coin.You could say heads and tails and I hope the animal rights people wouldn't come after you!Go with your heart and gut,don't change it unless YOU want to.I hope you don't!(Our coins have a Face on one side,"heads",and the other is called "tails",just in case you were wondering.)
Last edited by Doug Denslowe; 04-05-2013 at 05:28 AM.
I love this song Foreal..
Thank you!
The journey has begun. "Nothing safe is worth the drive."
Hahaha=,lol: Goodevening, Flower Bro, well, fascinating you didnot associate things, I am happy she changed it,lol!
But your line about head and tails made me roll over the floor! A good one, Doug!
Thanks Tania for making the other changes. You are a clever girl!*
Great stuff. I love the chorus. Read through with relish till i got to the line that made me panic...reading all the comments i know Tania did not actually mean it the way it seemed(@ least she sounded sincere).
Also, there was "pain is blue", so i think the other color-coding followed in that sense, but the juxtaposition of those two colors with the words "love" & "hate" ended up making it sound so divisive.
Tania, just a little sensitivity in later works please. Thanks.
(waiting for Doug to defend the people of the Blue Nation )
Thank you Amaryn.
Blue Meanies (from Yellow Submarine)says it all!