Revenge

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  1. Santana Lonergan said:

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    VERSE 1
    A life turned upside down
    Is a life the wrong way around
    Overcome the twists and turns
    Take pride in your burns
    Because it's all that pride
    See you to the other side
    It's like those before us say
    "Live happy to live another day"
    Never made sense to me before
    I always thought they lied
    But now I see it all the way

    CHORUS
    The grass is really greener
    It's my turn to be meaner
    Love the taste of sweet revenge
    On all the bullies that brought me down
    Now you fall,Now you drown

    VERSE 2
    I'm taking everybody down
    Down and Out!
    Throw you out like the trash you are
    Or roll you over with the wheels on my car
    Because it's when your gone
    That I can move on
    With a life that's better than darkness
    A light that breaks the darkness
    I've never been so alone
    But I'm happy with it
    A puzzle well fit

    REFRAIN

    VERSE 3
    Of course you never meant
    All the words that went
    Uncared for
    Of course I don't mean
    To wipe the world clean
    Of you and what you cared for

    REFRAINx2
    (And I'll wear your crown
    To be the new clown)
     
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    amaryn said:

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    Your song is a Serenade of Revenge,lol and I like it.
    It should have a strong, awakening rhythm,
    bursting into rage during the chorus/refrain.

    Thanks!
     
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    Doug Denslowe said:

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    Now this "hit" me on the first read through;Fantastic song lyric,absolutely magnificent!On the end where you write refrain 2x,it's usually better to write it out,it makes it easier on your audience.
    Last edited by Doug Denslowe; 05-10-2013 at 07:38 PM.
     
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    Jim Colyer said:

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    Some say revenge is "sweet." They taught us in school that revenge is the main theme of Hamlet. Not so! Death and why we have to die are the main themes.
     
  5. Santana Lonergan said:

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    Quote Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe View Post
    Now this "hit" me on the first read through;Fantastis song lyric,absolutely magnificent!On the end where you write refrain 2x,it's usually better to write it out,it makes it easier on your audience.
    thanks for the compliment ill make sure to take on board ur advice thanks XD