Check out my rhymes!

Hey guys!

I'm new here, but I've been writing for close to a year and have been listening to rap my whole life. Before I start showing my stuff publicly I want you guys to check it. So if you guy could give me your honest opinion it'd be greatly appreciated.

-RCat

Freestyle to Baby Don't Cry -Tupac


Keep your head up.

You may want to break down and cry
May want to end it all and just die
But imagine your loved ones faces as they say good bye
To a casket that has you inside.

That's something that can not happen
Hurts too much to even imagine
You mean something, there's a purpose
I promise you aren't worthless
There's a reason you're here
And this probably sounds weird
Comin from a guy who has no faith
Who doesn't believe in that place
That You call heaven
The one who has no where to be Sundays at eleven
Even though I don't know what I believe in
There's one thing that ill never let you lose faith in
The man in the mirror is what I call amazing.

hi bud its pretty good effort to be honest but the bit i felt a might need re wording a little is "There's a reason you're here,And this probably sounds weird,
Comin from a guy who has no faith" just dont fully flow when i read it but this might just be me good effort tho

Originally Posted by trueperfectionisimperfect

hi bud its pretty good effort to be honest but the bit i felt a might need re wording a little is "There's a reason you're here,And this probably sounds weird,
Comin from a guy who has no faith" just dont fully flow when i read it but this might just be me good effort tho

Thanks for the help man