I'm living in the past I need to move on
Cant seem to do it not even through a song
I'm stuck in time feeding off my memories
No end to it's path no cure for it's disease
Slowly killing me why wont it retreat?
Leave me be to see what I need to see
Be free, only I can help me
but I'm shadowed by the dark is this my destiny?
Cant take it cant seem to shake it
living my life and hating every bit
so **** jealousy's a *****, 'stime to get over it
How do i do this I need to get through
Pain in my emotion no matter what I do
Loosing my control brain needs to defuse
A loss of connection but nothing much to loose
As time goes by I sink a little more
stare at my reflection, got scared of what I saw
a devil in disguise pure evil in distraught
terror arise got my back against the wall
back against the wall with my tears on the floor
hand on my heart I cant take this anymore
turn to the pills? na for this there aint no cure
I hate to admit it but I feel so insecure
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Life's Defeat
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I like it but look up consonance and assonance, you have steady end rhymes but flow is MUCH more than just end rhymes man. You have the basics for end-rhyming down, and not EVERY line needs to rhyme, longer lines with less rhymes sometimes have the potential to have much meaner drops.