Watching time

Nice song I've been thinking about with a little message

Sitting at platform c
Watching life unfold to me
Waiting for my train to come
Watching timeeee

Been sitting her for a while
People flowing like the Nile
Looking for there journeys end
Watching timeeee

People start piling on
But this train ain't the one
Wait just a little more
Watching timeeee

Now I know my trains on its way
I'm going to leave today
But time keeps rolling on
With no train in sightttt

Il figure what I have to do
Use my feet one and two
Il fine my own way there
In my timeee

This pretty good true! I like it. Not much to suggest, maybe one thing..the last verse "Use my feet one and two" seems a lil awkward for some reason (imo) but with the right music it may be fine. I liked this regardless, nice job. P.S. maybe another verse to make it longer, unless it has a lot of musical interlude, in that case disregard the "P.S."...lol

Put a chorus in and this could be a good song.

Cheers look il add another verse or two and see if I can see if I can get the right music to it

And thanks doug I was thinking of doing it without a chours sort of Bob Dylan-esk lol but if it doesn't work how it is when I add music il try it with a chorus