Wake up

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    Johnb31 said:

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    Line "When you act like someone else You will only hurt yourself" suggested by Peter Both

    You can tell yourself you're someone cool
    You can tell yourself that you rule
    But do you even know
    Who you really are
    When you act like someone else
    You will only hurt yourself
    "Chorus"
    Wake up, wake up
    Who are you really
    Don't
    Make up, make up
    Someone else to be
    Just
    Get up, get up
    And be who you want to be


    You can wear all the nice clothes
    You can be on top of the school
    But that don't mean you're someone cool
    It just means you ain't got a clue
    And your lost stuck like glue
    Trying to be something you're not it just ain't true
    "Chorus"
    Wake up, wake up
    Who are you really
    Don't
    Make up, make up
    Someone else to be
    Just
    Get up, get up
    And be who you want to be
    Be who you want to be
    "Bridge"
    Just open your eyes
    And see who you are inside
    And come alive
    And recognize that you've
    Been living a lie
    Trying to be someone
    That you're not
    "Chorus" x2
    Wake up, wake up
    Who are you really
    Don't
    Make up, make up
    Someone else to be
    Just
    Get up, get up
    And be who you want to be
    Last edited by Johnb31; 10-16-2013 at 09:07 AM.
    There is not enough space or time to truly let the song unwind
     
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    This is great John.The fifth and sixth line seem to be "the weak link" in a great piece.I only say this because,for me,everything flows well,except these two lines.I hope this helps,if not......I tried!
     
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    Any help is great Doug!! Thank you and I see what you mean I'm not sure if I care about this song enough to worry about it.
    There is not enough space or time to truly let the song unwind
     
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    Quote Originally Posted by Johnb31 View Post
    Any help is great Doug!! Thank you and I see what you mean I'm not sure if I care about this song enough to worry about it.
    Good!I'll work on the other one you do care about!
     
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    I feel like I'm in a writing rut
    There is not enough space or time to truly let the song unwind
     
  6. Peter Both said:

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    Songs like this need to be performed. One, two, three, go! Maybe this link will give you a bit of inspiration where you might take this song musically.
    Here you see a band who is about to become the next big thing. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=y3Y_eCDct2U
    It's the same energy I feel pouring out of your lyrics.

    A suggestion for lines five and six: "When you act like someone else. You will only hurt yourself".
     
  7. Brandon Kyalo said:

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    Wow,its such an awesome piece. Am really encouraged by the main idea in your song John.
    How i wish this makes me take a new dimension in life...life is a reality for sure! Thanks and good luck.
     
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    I like your suggested like a lot thank you so much it makes it way better
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    I figure we've all been there including myself trying to be something were not in order to fit in I found it only leads to you getting hurt and you're better off just being yourself.
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    I love The Police the energy in their music was and is intoxicating. "Message in a bottle" favorite song by them. I love next to you as well it's been awhile since I've heard it. Thank you for the comment and the suggestion!
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    Roxanne is my favorite Police song.....by a long shot.It's got both rhythms I love.....rock and Ragge.(Mostly the rock change into the chorus is what gets me)
     
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    It's my 2nd favorite by them but very very close I love the Roxanne hold out so awesome!
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    Quote Originally Posted by Johnb31 View Post
    It's my 2nd favorite by them but very very close I love the Roxanne hold out so awesome!
    John,for a youngster you have great taste.....it gives me hope for the future.......
     
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    Unfortunately I am a rare breed.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Johnb31 View Post
    Unfortunately I am a rare breed.
    Then......my hope has vanished........I knew you were a rare breed.......maybe your great grandchildren?
     
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    "When you act like someone else
    You will only hurt yourself"
    This is super powerful. And great suggestion from Peter! It goes well together and is soso true. I've experienced trying to be someone who I wasn't and it REALLY does only hurt you in the long run. You miss out on a lot of things that you could have had.
    I really like this one, John. Its very very good <3
     
  17. Ali Morrione said:

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    Great Lyrics! So intense and powerful. It reminds me of Avril Lavigne's song "Complicated". I can feel the amount of work you put into this. :] Keep on writing, you've got talent.
     
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    Quote Originally Posted by Ali Morrione View Post
    Great Lyrics! So intense and powerful. It reminds me of Avril Lavigne's song "Complicated". I can feel the amount of work you put into this. :] Keep on writing, you've got talent.
    Yeah John,keep it up.......