Can we turn our lives around?
Erase the past without a sound?
Scream out loud. What’s going wrong?
This is not where I belong!
Vs. 1:
We, we all make mistakes,
We’ve fallen from grace.
We’re falling, behind
Our eyes shut tight, there’s no room to see the light.
As we cast our shadows on the ground.
Ch. 1:
Tell me what is down the road,
I find I’m scared of the unknown.
When all the lights have faded,
Tell me why you’re still jaded.
Separate yourself again,
Loneliness is the new trend.
Like shattered mirrors upon the wall,
There’s no way to save us all.
Vs. 2:
Illusions or memories? I can’t tell the difference anymore.
What happened? So breakable is what we have become.
Throw all your regrets away, come back to me, say you’ll stay this time around.
Bridge:
As thoughts of you are haunting me, it seems
So long since I have seen that fire, desire in your eyes.
This is not where I belong!
Make your mark, don’t be scared.
Leave behind the tears you’ve shed.
Don’t look back, you’re such a mess.
It’s become a metamorphosis.
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False Belonging
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Well folks,we've got a new heavy hitter here at ATL,named Karri Faye Yates!I've haven't,if ever been this impressed with a new writer.I look forward to reading your songs and your comments on others threads.This song is great!
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Thanks so much! Now I'm for sure blushing hehe. This is one of my favorite works
I'm so excited to be here!
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Hi Kerri,
You caught my attention when you left a like on a song I've posted.. so thanks.
I'd like to know what the first verse is. Maybe an introduction? I'm glad to see that you don't have a consistent rhyme scene in your verses. That makes your chorus stand out easily. I believe "False Belonging" is a very good song, although somewhat abstract and it felt like there's not one idea behind this. -
Yes! It is an intro
Originally Posted by Zakynthos
Hi Kerri,
You caught my attention when you left a like on a song I've posted.. so thanks.
I'd like to know what the first verse is. Maybe an introduction? I'm glad to see that you don't have a consistent rhyme scene in your verses. That makes your chorus stand out easily. I believe "False Belonging" is a very good song, although somewhat abstract and it felt like there's not one idea behind this.
It's a very...strange song. I have it all planned out in my head, but it just feels so awkward on paper! This was my first real experiment with something other than your typical love/breakup songs. Perhaps it's still a work in progress, if I ever get back to it
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I feel you. Words are sometimes hard to manipulate.. Originally Posted by Kerri Faye Yates
Yes! It is an intro
It's a very...strange song. I have it all planned out in my head, but it just feels so awkward on paper! This was my first real experiment with something other than your typical love/breakup songs. Perhaps it's still a work in progress, if I ever get back to it -
That's no joke, it can be so frustrating when it's on the tip of your tongue but you can't quite remember, so you put down something similar that isn't nearly as effective!
~Kerri Faye -
I hope Zak's bump will give you some duly deserved attention!Come on guys,give Kerri some feedback!She's my new favorite writer!
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This is some good writing. I like it bunches. I do however have one question
"Like shattered mirrors upon the wall,
There’s no way to save us all."
I may be missing something and if so.."duh" but I don't quite get the analogy in this line.
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Thank you! Originally Posted by LooknGlass
I guess I was kind of thinking when a mirror shatters it's nothing but pieces of what is used to be and it's impossible to be put back together. You can't "save" all the pieces.~Kerri Faye -
It's great, you have the concept right and flow is flowing
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No broken piece of glass can be saved. Lol Originally Posted by Kerri Faye Yates
