this isn't a fairytale

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  1. Jane99 said:

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    Hey this is my first post and i have to say that i'm 14 and from germany so my english isn't the best so sorry for that

    lyrics:

    I know i’m gonna fail the test
    Doesn’t matter how hard i try
    You’ll always find a way to
    Make me fail

    They say everything’s gonna be alright in the end
    Like in those old fairytales
    But i know this isn’t a fairytale
    There’s no prince on a white horse who will come and save me
    ‘cause this isn’t a fairytale
    Oh oh no
    Oh oh no

    I‘m gonna be in the dark alone
    I‘m gona drown in the ocean now
    There’s no helping hand form e
    There’s no one who will save mylife

    They say everything’s gonna be alright in the end
    Like in those old fairytales
    But i know this isn’t a fairytale
    There’s no prince on a white horse who will come and save me
    ‘cause this isn’t a fairytale
    Oh oh no
    Oh oh no



    Can i have your white horse
    I need to make ma an happy enfd on my own
    Cause if this not a fairytale i wanny have at least an ending like in those old fairytales
    Oh and this is my happy end
     
  2. Peter Both said:

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    This isn't bad at all. At least it's way better than what I wrote when I was 14 years old. I'm confident that if you keep writing you'll be able to improve your skills and grow as a lyricist. Grüsse aus Holland!
     
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    Doug Denslowe said:

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    Like my good friend Peter says,not only isn't this "not bad" but considering it's not in your native tongue,I'm quite impressed!It has a rhythm that makes it easy to imagine how it's to be sung.It may not be what you had in mind,but who cares,it can be sung!I always judge a song by if I can imagine how it's to be sung.Good first song lyric,I hope you stick around and write some more.
     
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    Jim Colyer said:

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    This is very good for a first post. And, you're right, life is not a fairytale.
     
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    coral834 said:

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    honestly the fact that your only 14 and a writing lyrics speaks volumes.. whether they're good or bad. i wish i would have started when i was 14...keep it up, keep learning and writing..learn to write in different style..heck learn it all..like i said i wish i would have started at 14..awesome job on your first post