The empty moon

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  1. Eccer's Avatar

    Eccer said:

    Default The empty moon

    The empty moon

    The empty moon was floating
    without a world
    and the people dancing



    And we were two, just you and I

    Thus the void corresponding
    with your presence, something you said..

    "as if communicating, transmitting thoughts
    I know you by mere gestures"

    And there it was
    That empty expression
    foraging between
    its space...

    There's something eerie and overwhelming

    when I walk alone with you

    yor tapestry looming

    ever so still
    Last edited by Eccer; 01-27-2014 at 02:33 PM.
  2. Amethystos's Avatar

    Amethystos said:


    I'm certainly not the one to speak about poems ...
    but this is a beyond doubt excellent presentation of a poem!
    "Gilgamesh, where are you hurrying to?
    You will never find that life for which you are looking.
    When the gods created man they allotted to him death,
    but life they retained in their own keeping"
  3. StadiaMania's Avatar

    StadiaMania said:


    Very nice! Your choice of words and placement really paint a clear picture. Keep it up Eccer!
  4. Eccer's Avatar

    Eccer said:


    Thanks all, I guess it turned out better than expected! If there's anything you guys want me to comment on, please leave a link