I thought you were my fairytale

Sorry if the lines came out weird I'm on my phone and when I try to fix something it clicks about 6 lines above the line that I'm clicking on so sorry!! But what do you think?

First verse

When I first looked in your eyes,
I didn't see all your lies,
Your smile was so sweet,
How was I to know you would cheat,
How could I have been so naive,
Now its time for you to leave.

Chorus

I thought you were my fairy tale come true,
Until the real you shown through,
I thought you were my prince,
And I guess it just doesnt make sense,
How you swept me off my feet,
And led me to happily never after!

2nd Verse

It seems like just yesterday,
We said hello then goodbye,
I knew someday we would come to an end,
But i didnt know that,
I would lose a really good friend,

Chorus
I thought you were my fairytale come true,
Until the real you shown through,
I thought you were my prince
And I guess it doesn't make sense,
How you swept me off my feet,
And led me to happily never after!

Bridge

I thought you were my hero,
Now your just a zero,
We used to have so much fun,
Why'd you have to run,
They say you will reap what you will sow,
Now we will never know.

Final Chorus

I thought you were my fairy tale come true,
Until the real you shown through,
I thought you were my prince,
And I guess it just doesn't make sense,
How you swept me off my feet, And led me to happily never after!
I thought you were my fairytale come true,
But now I know the real you,
And its time for this fairytale to come to an end.

I'm surprised this didn't get more replies!It's a nice song with good rhymes.Not a story that hasn't been heard before,but quite nice.

Thanks! If there is one thing that I have learned about this song it is that people either like it a lot or think it's too teenish and hate it. There is never an in between with this song. Lol I wrote this song when I was 16 so it is a bit of a cliche but I think it's still good but then again I wrote it

I am on the like-side of this song. It has a great girl-group quality. I imagine the first stanza to be spoken with background voices singing 'oooh'. Something like this: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Vx6DtgW_uh0

Mel..i know exactly what you mean when u said people could or do think its teenish...i can see how they could make that comparison..I really do like it though..I would do like a rockish/pop song with someone like Pink as the singer...

and doug is right. its stroy thats been heard a 1000 times B4. and it still amazies me how so many people can write awesoem songs about the same thing..Love..or a broken heart..

Keep writting Jeff

thanx! I have the chorus as fast and upbeat but the verses as slow and strong. My boyfriend is composing the music and as soon as he is done I will put up a link most probably a youtube one

Does anyone know anywhere that i can send my lyrics?

I do like the oooh parts lol

A story about a part of life we can all relate to. beautiful,simple and poetic the building blocks to the best songs

Well done

Thanks! This was the first song that I ever wrote when I was 16

Mell this is a good song

..I love it honestly
.sorry I've been off lately. Please check out your email
.I've sent you my number. And once again,I love this song you've written
Its amazing... #** kisses