Senses (1/20/14)

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  1. Kerri Faye Yates's Avatar

    Kerri Faye Yates said:

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    My eyes are growing tired,
    My mind growing numb.
    I can’t feel my fingers,
    This has gone on for too long.

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    Awake my senses,
    Bring me alive with your touch.
    I’d give anything to feel,
    The slightest nudge.
    Breathe me in, exhale me out,
    Jolt me to the core.
    I need to feel alive again,
    Before I am done for.

    I taste you in my dreams,
    But never when I wake.
    I’m terrified of what this means,
    A feeling I can’t shake.

    I hear your voice in my head,
    But where have you gone?
    My eyes are searching for you,
    But you’ve been away too long.

    C
    Awake my senses,
    Bring me alive with your touch.
    I’d give anything to feel,
    The slightest nudge.
    Breathe me in, exhale me out,
    Jolt me to the core.
    I need to feel alive again,
    Before I am done for.

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    I smell your sweet cologne,
    But you are not here.
    It’s scary how your presence,
    Still lingers here.
    It lingers.
    It lingers here.
    Lingers.

    C
    Awake my senses,
    Bring me alive with your touch.
    I’d give anything to feel,
    The slightest nudge.
    Breathe me in, exhale me out,
    Jolt me to the core.
    I need to feel alive again,
    Before I am done for.
    Last edited by Kerri Faye Yates; 01-22-2014 at 02:58 PM.
    ~Kerri Faye
     
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    Justin Sylver said:

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    I think "the slightest nudge" or "the slightest of nudges" would flow better than "even just a nudge".

    And maybe change "still lingers here" to "continues to adhere". But I'm just being picky. It's a good song.
     
  3. Peter Both said:

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    I can truly relate to this song. I know the experience how someone's presence (or absence) can be felt in all your senses. Sometimes when I'm standing in the subway or in a queu I can smell a perfume an ex-girlfriend used to wear. That always stirs up some memories. I don't know the name of that perfume and don't want to ask a stranger about it. I'm afraid it will come across as the lamest of opening lines. ;-)
     
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    Jim Colyer said:

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    Funny how even when people have moved on, traces remain.
     
  5. Kerri Faye Yates's Avatar

    Kerri Faye Yates said:

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    Quote Originally Posted by Peter Both View Post
    I can truly relate to this song. I know the experience how someone's presence (or absence) can be felt in all your senses. Sometimes when I'm standing in the subway or in a queu I can smell a perfume an ex-girlfriend used to wear. That always stirs up some memories. I don't know the name of that perfume and don't want to ask a stranger about it. I'm afraid it will come across as the lamest of opening lines. ;-)
    I understand completely! Sometimes I swear I see someone out of the corner of my eye, even if it's an empty room. How strange!
    ~Kerri Faye
     
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    Kerri Faye Yates said:

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    Quote Originally Posted by Jim Colyer View Post
    Funny how even when people have moved on, traces remain.
    I definitely agree.
    ~Kerri Faye