Empty Skin

​I never knew that
Life could be so abstract
I've been here, there, everywhere
Trapped in the eyes of a distant stare
And I can't get away
I can't escape
The pain in my heart is here to stay
"Chorus"
I need to breathe
I need to breathe
Out all my insecurities
I need to know
I need to know
Who I am
And fill this empty skin


I never knew that
Life could be so relax
It seems that I've been caught in the spin
That goes round and round again
I need a release
A need new way to be me
"Chorus"
I need to breathe
I need to breathe
Out all my insecurities
I need to know
I need to know
Who I am
And fill this empty skin
"Bridge"
I'm hanging on
By the thinnest thread
I can't hold on
I'm losing my grip
I got to get ahold of this
Before I lose
Myself
Before I lose
Myself
"Chorus"
I need to breathe
I need to breathe
Out all my insecurities
I need to know
I need to know
Who I am
And fill this empty skin
Fill this empty skin
Fill this empty skin

Great one........one little suggestion..........
I never knew that
Life could be so abstract........

You know,clean,no extra words crowding the vibe........
One last thing;split the third sentence into three.Here,there,should end each line.See if this works.

Perfect Doug thank you so much for the help!

Originally Posted by Johnb31

Perfect Doug thank you so much for the help!

I only suggest stuff if I'm real sure about it.You're a great writer,so I'm always careful to only suggest the apparent (to me)things!

I like it. I think Doug was right. He's a genius. So are you. I'd like to hear this one.

This chorus is phenomenal!

Kinda dark and sad. Very well crafted thoughts though.
I too would like to hear the song.