Dark depression

Will probably add more to this later but until then enjoy....

Smile my friend the sun shines
But you dwell in your confines
Every day seem like a chore
Like you don't want to be anymore

Your only connection is silence
Hold in on your life's grievance
Fear of failure your archenemy
Leading you to the infirmary

Slipped in to a dark depression
Your mind in a recession
Hiding like it's a profession
From the happy days ahead

World so cold and dark
No silvery song of the lark
Black cloud always around
Keeping eyes focused on the ground

Trying to help you in the darkness
But no light do your eyes witness
Your body getting bruised and hurled
shoulder the problems of the world

Slipped in to a dark depression
Your mind in a recession
Hiding like it's a profession
From the happy days ahead

I can relate to this a lot. The personality and character in your writing is really seductive which made this piece a really good read. You stuck to concept well and worded everything pretty well too. I think that if you make the rhyme schemes a little more complicated and added in some multi's, it would be a better piece than it already is.

Thanks for the advice il get to work on it and try to make it better