"You live with the world"

Hi you guys! I've been working on this one for a while,but need some feedback.
Hope you'll find the time to give me some...

Thanks!!!


INTRO/CHORUS
When I'm gone
you'll see tomorrow
shines a light to guide the way
Stand straight and don't be afraid
'cause when your gone -your gone
even though the world moves on
Realize my grandma' was right
she told me
You live with the world
and not the world living with you
you got your days - hats called life
use them well
and be to late to realize
that you've gotta do what you wanna do now
Cause tomorrow the worlds moved on



V1
Make your marks
glow and spark
blossom even when it's dark
cause this life's to short for hesitations and regrets
Don't fight your destiny
come what may
Don't let it break or bend you
learn from your mistakes

V2
Soon you'll see
its not how you planned it
its was supposed to be
but let no dream stand in you way
be your best every day
live with life and you'll see
it all ends up right where its ment to be


V3
Time goes by
you'll quickly learn
As the world goes on
people come and people go
some stay a while and some just pass through
Be sure to enjoy them moments that they all give to you
Don't waist a raindrop
or the warmth of the sun

People come and people go, alright. It's hard to say what reality is. Good insight!

I'd appriciate all feedbacks...both good and bad��,so please help me get better��!!

Is it THAT bad? What's missing? Any tips ideas on how to make it better???