"Reigns"

Reigns

(v1)
My dynasty will shine eternal
Millennia could pass summarised in a journal
Crushing historians left and right
Flared and fisted, Solar might
Learned from time, I’ll be a humble King
Hand me the reigns so we can stop tumbling
Worked smarter, not harder, like my mantra
Grew these wise grapes, use my mind as a decanter
Take a glass of this wisdom,
Itll leave you breathless
Hold to your principles, or you’ll die restless
And forgotten by time,
Unlike me,
Who Was fashioned by design
To lead these people after the first had fallen,
The 2ndsun rose to answer the calling
(hook)
You don’t have to know me too feel me
You don’t have to show me you can see
Just listen up, and listen dear
The reins are mine, our futures clear

(v2)
Building an empire to rival the colony, Stop being slaves to the ****ing economy
Why be working to keep them autonomous, To afraid to ever complain real eponymous
Fuelling the world for their thoughtless foreign needs, If only you was enlightened to all of your deeds
Ignorance aint accepted anymore, Hand me the reigns, its my time on the floor.
Im trying to be lightbringer but not like the devil
didn’t fall from heaven, despite what some will tell you
im up in the stars, shining west and east
the 2ndSuns rise crusade to bring the peace

(hook)
You don’t have to know me too feel me
You don’t have to show me you can see
Just listen up, and listen dear
The reins are mine, our futures clear

I bow to thee humbled. Except for a slight grammar mistake, in which semantics isn't lost... it is perfection.

Originally Posted by BackInBlack

I bow to thee humbled. Except for a slight grammar mistake, in which semantics isn't lost... it is perfection.

Thank you truly, means a lot to me! will be adding more soon, hope you enjoy them as much!

This is cleverly written and it looks as if you've really put the effort in
bravo

Thank you!

The following lines are well-written: "Take a glass of this wisdom/Itll leave you breathless/Hold to your principles, or you’ll die restless" and "Building an empire to rival the colony, Stop being slaves to the f-u-c-king economy". When you write "Hand me the reigns" in both verses, you are not as commanding and in control as the other lines. It is like a "Please, sir. Can I have some more?" type of situation. Instead of asking for the reigns, just take it. You have proved that you are capable and willing.