Unworthy

Not finished this is a scrap bit of what I want to do. Any and all improvement will be appreciated, it's been a while since I wrote something.


Sit above the thunder
On your sun soak cloud nine
Bask in the warmth and light
Of the golden rays

Enjoy those clear skies
That surround your every day
But you will never truly appreciate
There celestial beauty

I'd rather feel the pain
To enjoy those clear days
At least I know I'm alive
Amongst the considered unworthy

Not one single day worked
But you have it all made
Never truly understanding
To be someone else

No need to find your limit
Because you will never sleep rough
You stand there acting so tough
Behind your men mountains

I'd rather feel the pain
To enjoy those clear days
At least I know I'm alive
Amongst the considered unworthy

Fighting to see another day
Living life on a knife edge
The way the rained on people live
And the way it will always be

We have a closer friends and family
Who gladly die for us
If money became useless
Who can you say would do the same

I'd rather feel the pain
To enjoy those clear days
At least I know I'm alive
Amongst the considered unworthy

Hmm...interesting, certainly. I feel like some of the stanzas make more sense than some of the others. Maybe some of it's a little wordy? I'm not sure. Just feeling like it doesn't flow quite right!

Yer I agree with it not flowing quite right especially at the end. Il get on it and see what I can do thanks