Mind game disease/ poisonous memories

Thread: Mind game disease/ poisonous memories

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  1. trueperfectionisimperfect said:

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    Still needs a another verse or two but you get the point.... I hope. Improvements welcomed

    My head my solitude
    Where I hang my thoughts
    Let them linger and stew
    Weakening my broken heart

    Time given is time wasted
    Ruined moments well spent
    Memory's of yesterday forgot
    My life came and went

    Attacked from the inside
    Mind game disease
    Kick whilst I'm down with
    Poisonous memories

    Bit my tongue in your barrage
    Of foul words and scrutiny
    Working hard for a better life
    Alone is my destiny

    Tease me in your underwear
    Like daggers in my side
    Photos of our life line
    Seeing moments where we died

    Attacked from the inside
    Mind game disease
    Kick whilst I'm down with
    Poisonous memories
     
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    Doug Denslowe said:

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    I like what you've written,although it strikes me more as a poem,than lyrics..........
     
  3. trueperfectionisimperfect said:

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    It's a valid point think some restructure of the verses is needed. Cheers pal