Quicksand

Thread: Quicksand

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  1. bearheart said:

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    Quicksand

    I need to hear that whisper
    That seductive sound of winter
    Chills me to the bone to hear her
    begging me, begging me
    Give my life to you
    Live my life in servitude
    No more giving in to these urges
    Medicate my mind to cure this

    Claw my eyes out just make a point
    My words will be heard & dissapoint
    Expect nothing less or nothing more
    Judge my mind before I hit the floor
    Here I come crashing through the door

    Wings of an angel burn in your hands
    Hide it best you can, drowning in the quicksand
    Should I reach out or leave you where I stand
    Begging me, begging me
    Gave my life to you
    Nothing left to lose
    This is me breaking free
    Keep your hands away from me


    Claw my eyes out just make a point
    My words will be heard & dissapoint
    Expect nothing less or nothing more
    Judge my mind before I hit the floor
    Here I come crashing through the door
     
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    +Technist Barrier- said:

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    +Again, these lyrics could be improved by a ending that adds more emphasize to the song. The verses are cool and I know that you have used efficient time to work all these lyrics of yours. Try to work on you endings...-
    +To imagine is everything, to know is nothing at all.>A.France
    Oh yeah, I forgot, and always expect the unexpected. -