Pls review my song

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  1. Ash6661 said:

    Default Pls review my song

    I wrote a song about a break up with my ex who I went out with for 3 years. I just got into song writing so it might be a bit bad but I'm open for all constructive criticism.

    Me, I've been doin fine
    There's a line between us
    I gotta start cleaning this mess you left unless you wanna help
    But I know that you're far to gone
    I'm small but you're beautiful to me
    insecure, impure and a broken mess
    These rooms will never be the same
    Sever these ties I made
    Fade away into grey
    I'm small but you're beautiful to me
    You hate the way I pushed you out
    All in all these years I've wasted have been tainted
    By you're distaste
     

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