Nothing Left (the end)

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  1. GlennB. said:

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    you were there for me
    i couldnt see, a life without you
    all i thought about was your face next to mine..
    AND..
    all these dreams...
    they come to a rough reality..
    and ive got nothing left...(nothing at all)

    i look into your eyes, and i now i see
    that i couldnt live my life without you beside me
    i take a step back, i look at the picture of us...
    was it ever worth enough?
    for you...for me...
    could this be..
    the end...
    the ENNNNNNNNNNNNNND?????

    i stop and think about the times we shared
    you were hardly there
    and now i can breath again
    for now...i guess ill be all alone..
    bitin my tongue, tryin not to say...nothing at all.
    and now ive got nothing left...
    nothing left....(nothing at all)

    i look into your eyes, and now i see
    that i couldnt live my life without you beside me
    i take a step back, i look at the picture of us..
    girl, was it ever worth enough??!
    for you..for me...
    could this be...THE END!

    i crryyyy..at the sitr of you
    i triiieed, to be with you
    i knooooww, this could never work..
    we tried 2 times and **** got worse..

    could this be..could this be...

    THE END....

    i look into your eyes, and now i see
    my life is better without u here with me
    my steps arent back, im pushing forward
    further away from her!
    for me.....it wasnt you..
    for you...it wasnt me...
    this is the end...

    the end...



    wow...well...lets see i had to get somethin on the board so i wrote this in about 5 minutes...i know its not the BEST or anything...but its without brainstorming anything...off the top of the head...so give me some credit...PLEASE critique...i know it needs it
     
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    SpudMunky said:

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    Hey there! Well considering you wrote that in about 5 minutes that's quite good! Sometimes the best writing comes from things that we don't plan, it's from when we just pen to paper! However saying that, there are a few lines that I am unsure about. This line "was it ever worth enough?" there's just something about it that doesn't seem to quite fit? Maybe something like was it really worth it all? Maybe? And in the first verse I'd lose the and? But then this is all just my opinion and I could be completely wrong! But like I said before for something that has been written in 5 minutes it's really good! Well done!
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