untitled \,,/

the begining of my last song for a wile.

(sing with a Blackmetal Growl)

Ride with the sithe
Forfeit your life
Ride with the sithe

death at your doorstep,
calling you by name,
takeing you by the hand,
Takeing pain away

Angel at the gallows,
Slaping you with sins
Tightens the noose round' your neck,
Legs Kicking in the wind

Nice lyrics. You misspelled "takeing" it's "taking;" you never put "e" before "ing."
How can death take your pain away? I suggest that you put "filling you with shame" instead of "taking your pain away."

Hope this helps,

Good luck!

If its untitled then why dont you call it 'Ride With The Scithe'? Seems like a pretty good title to me.